On Thu, 17 Jun 1999, Donny Cheng wrote:

Another Time, Same Place:  Life Goes On

/o~Oh bwa di!  Oh bwa da!~o/

	"Akane you have to eat something.  That's it.  That's a good girl,"

Akane:	Goo goo ga da!

Ukyo had not stepped foot out of Ucchan's since they had gotten back
also.

Take out 'also'

 Ten years of searching for Ranma down the drain, Nabiki supposed was
not something easily swallowed.

Comma after 'supposed'

It
was true that he had often been led astray by the sight of others such
as that amazon that claimed Saotome to be her husband,

Hmmm?  When was this?

The vile Saotome did not deserve to be
mentioned in the same breath as the goddess much less have the same name
that Kuno held dear to in his heart. 

Take out either 'to' or 'in'.

	Akane's dull eyes flashed with hatred as Kuno's words reached her.  Her
hand shot out with ferocious speed and grabbed his shirt.

Kuno:  But Akane!  You shouldn't be so foward in your affec... *whack*

Roughly, she
pulled him to her until his face was an inch from her own.

Isn't he taller than her?  How does this work, unless she unbalanced him.
And that wouldn't work well, either, unless she has *really* long arms.

I guess she could have pulled herself up, but I think that ruins the mood
you're trying to set.

	Kuno was shaken as Akane released him.  Indignantly, he patted his
crumpled gi down until it was smooth again.

I thought he what he wore is called something else besides 'gi'.

Folly to be envious of being crazy, was it not?

Nice.

Nabiki had the
satisfaction of watching Kuno's jaw become unglued to the rest of his
face.

*plop*

Kuno:	Sowwy, dhe whepwocy ih getting wurf.
	(Sorry, the leprocy is getting worse)

	"Uh, he slept... I mean, he is... oh my!  How should I put this?  Ryoga
has been sleeping with Akane for the past year."

	"What!?  But, but, what about Ranma?" Nabiki asked, her jaw dropping to
the ground at Kasumi's statement.

"Oh, him too.  As well as me, Taro, Daddy, Shampoo, Ukyou, Konatsu,
Plum, Tsubasa..." 

Hours later

"...Rouge, Shinnosuke, and Mrs. Saotome.  And that's everyone.  No wait, I
forgot Sayuri.  Not you, though."

"..."

	"We only found out yesterday while you were out on one of your dates
with Kuno.  So, she's still a little sore and not talking to anyone
right now.  She's becoming a vegetable, I'm afraid.  I'll go up in a few
minutes to check on her again.  In the meantime, could you do something
about Ryoga.  Oh I didn't mean it like that, Nabiki," Kasumi said as her
sister developed a wild gleam in her eye and started to actually crack
her knuckles.  Nabiki wasn't a violent sort, but Kasumi knew that her
sister had other ways of dealing with 'problems'.  Ways that would make
a beating more preferable.

You know, when I read this, I was thinking that Kasumi meant that in the
same way that she was 'doing something' about Kuno, and that Nabiki was
about to show her sister how much she didn't appreciate it.

Silly, huh?

	"What?  That's your brilliant plan?" Nabiki asked incredulously as she
listened to what Pig Boy had to say for himself.

Why would she refer to Ryouga as Pig Boy?  That would be Ranma thinking,
not her.

	"Bwahahaha!  I tell you, Nabiki.  You think that joke was bad?  You
should listen to the time we snuck Happosai into the room as P-Chan. 

*wince*

He had
gotten much better since his first attempt at it, but it was not even
close to the level the people that care here before were used to.

The last part seems awkward.

She could not see for a moment, the
ninja copying what Ryoga and Mousse were attempting.

I kinda wonder what would work for Kodachi.  Pampering wouldn't work, and
the Kuno's are too dense to understand people yelling at them.

	*I think it's time I ended this little charade,* Nabiki thought sickly
as she looked at the two people who where shattered and broken for
different reason.

Heh.

	"You've got to be kidding me," Nabiki said, still shocked at what Kuno
was saying.

	"I must have you both!" Kuno yelled leaping at Nabiki.

	Fortunately for Nabiki, Akane's fist intercepted him.  "Looks like you
did too good a job of pretending to be his girlfriend, Sis."

	"You owe me big," Nabiki said through her clenched teeth as she
purposely walked onto of Kuno's spread-eagled body.

Oh dear, I can see it now.

"If you wish to date with Tendo Nabiki, you must defeat her in battle!"

<hordes of men armed with various sporting goods stream towards her>

Still knowing the fianc�e closest to Ranma didn't
blame her, had made her want to kick herself less and less these days
over telling him of the brooch.

Comma after 'Still', remove the comma after 'her'

	She opened her door only to see Mousse standing there, ready to give
his daily opinion of her former husband.  She sucker punched him in the
stomach before he could talk.  "<Akane told me about you and Ryoga's
'idea' for making us better.  Now, that I know... say another bad word
about Ranma and I'll make sure your life is not worth living."

Forgot the end >

	Mousse obediently followed.  And almost slammed into the wall, had not
his glasses suddenly fall into place over the bridge of his nose.  He
looked at Shampoo in front of him.  He had thought for sure that someone
had placed his glasses from atop his head onto his face.  *Was it her?*

*sigh*

The list knows of my opinions concerning Mousse, so I won't go into them.


-Natsume Ranma Ranma
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The sardines weren't worth the trouble.  A few more shots, then 
Ryoga-san would overheat and explode.  Ducking around a corner, 
I managed to lose him as I entered the ramshackle residence of 
my Anime supplier.

One look at his face and I knew that I was betrayed.  "Tell me."
I insisted.  He refused, so I slammed him against the wall.
"Last chance.  Where can Ranma-Ranma find good fanfics?"
"Try Jason Liao." he whispered, before he slumped to the floor.
I heard the sounds of a door splintering as I left through the 
window, one step ahead of Tendo Heavy Industries...