At 01:20 PM 6/29/99 -0500, Chess Combites wrote:

I wrote this as a test of characterization for myself
I took a character I wanted to you for a future project.  put him in a 
slightly differnt situation to see how he behaved.  Hopefully this would 
give me a good enough grasp of the character to use them in my fic.
Any C&C would be usefull.

	Dear God, man, run your fic through a spellchecker! I've seen
so many mispellings, I want to rip my eyes out! Using "new" when the 
right word was "knew" is just the least of it! Look above, you even
managed to misspell "different".

Authors note:  

	I need to get into the mood for writng a story from our freind Mr. 

	"friend"

Taro's perspective.   Then while planning out out that story I wonderd what 

	"wondered"

he would think if he heard the song 'Boy Named Sue".  This pretty much came 

>from that there and was just a warm up.  I'm posting this because I want C&C 

on my rendition of Taro.  Is he out of character?  Would he have betten Sue

	"beaten"
 

to a bloody pulp.  Would he not given Sue his Name.  These I consider grey 
area in his character because Sue is someone who can understand Taro 
truthfully  would he be able to open up.  Also I would like C&C on my 
presintation of this event.

	"presentation"

send C&C to chess@umr.edu
http://www.umr.edu/~chess/pages/dogs.htm

	See what I'm talking about? That's just your author's notes!

	You have the potential for a really great short story here,
but the bad spelling and the errors in grammar are MOST irritating
and make it near impossible to enjoy the story.

	Please, PLEASE, find a good pre-reader who is
willing to work with you, and start using a spellcheck
program. You have promise. Don't let it be wasted.

	Ed Becerra

	"Dreamers may die, but the Dream is eternal.."