I'm not forcing anyone to use Japanese names. I'm only making them more
available. Pretty good story, though. I always felt that the Nyasu could

to

a better job without the two idiots. Something that seems to be missing,
though (No pun intended) is humor. Not much makes me laugh, but there's at
least one joke every 3 episodes that I think is hysterical. Even an

argument

about the bike would be good. It's obviously much harder to make jokes for
fanfiction, but some humor would work well. They say laughter is whe best
window to the soul's medicine, or something like that

It depends on what type of fanfic he's trying to write. Original Flavour?
Complete with goofy jokes? Or more of a serious tone? So far it seems more
like it's heading off in the serious direction from what I've read.
Especially since he mentioned that he could have set up some sad scenes to
lead into it, but didn't.

Comments on the fic itself:

Yeah, like you said, it is kind of short, but I'm not sure if expanding it
would be such a good idea unless it was important to the development of the
story. If you were going for humour, you could have set up some
funny-nothing scenes but for serious it would be hard not to make it drag
like you said.

Anyhow, you certainly got me wondering on what Pikachu's shocking desire
would be. And what he said to Togepi and Meowth ... I'll have to see more of
the story before I can comment further =P

Good job, and keep writing,

~Ace