Ah, much better.  I forgot two points in my last post, though.

1)	You're supposed to put a little bit of yourself into your work, so
be sure to make Tiger Shark's real name as Bogue.

2)	Interactivity is the key word these days (just ask Our Friend,
Bill Gates).  Have your characters break the fourth wall.

-Natsume Ranma Ranma
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The sardines weren't worth the trouble.  A few more shots, then 
Ryoga-san would overheat and explode.  Ducking around a corner, 
I managed to lose him as I entered the ramshackle residence of 
my Anime supplier.

One look at his face and I knew that I was betrayed.  "Tell me."
I insisted.  He refused, so I slammed him against the wall.
"Last chance.  Where can Ranma-Ranma find good fanfics?"
"Try Jason Liao." he whispered, before he slumped to the floor.
I heard the sounds of a door splintering as I left through the 
window, one step ahead of Tendo Heavy Industries...