Hi!

This is my first C&C.  Wish me luck!
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I noticed a lot of spelling errors.

	Kasumi walks into the dinning room

dining

after ward she proceeds in to the kitchen

Afterward she proceeds to the kitchen

	Nabiki stagers into the dinning room eyes the letters drowsily and 
proceeds to gather hears she notices one labeled "To the parents/gardiens 
of Ranma Soutome" and a similar one labeled for Akane.

     Nabiki staggers into the dining room, eyes the letters drowsily, and 
proceeds to gather hers.  While going through her letters she notices two 
simular envelopes, addressed: 'To the parents/guardians of Ranma Saotome and 
a simular one labelled for Akane.

	Akane woken by the sound of Nabiki staggering thought the house partially 
conches notices the letters lying on the floor.

        Akane,woken by the sound of Nabiki staggering throughout the house

conches???

"Great just. Great school notices" she grumbles.

"Just great! School notices!"

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*Snip*

	Ranma flies thought the are into the wall of the Dojo with a saucer stuck 
to the side of his head

???

"Aye, Akane, what the heck you do that for?!"

"Hey"

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Out side the Tendo Dojo a truck loaded with mats, dummies and an

ssortment of weapons pulls up in front of the Dojo.

Outside
(Runon sentence)

The driver hops out after straitening

Straightening

<*Smeg boy people shur can be violent in Japan.... Now where the heck is 
Friken High?*> he calmly asks no one inparticulare.

inparticular

His hair jet black and is tide back and goes down to his waist.

tied

His face looks as though he has a purnament tan
Permanent

"Hello can I help you sir?" she ask

asks.

Akane screams and punches him in the face yelling "YOU PURVERT

pervert

Wide eyed with fear

  Add a comma here

"What are you talking about Nabiki didn't you here what that purv..."

What are you talking about Nabiki?  Didn't you hear what that pervert

She quickly thumbs though it finding the phrase that he wanted said

skims through it, looking for the phrase that the man used.

Furinkan High

Peaking over her shoulder Nabiki says "Akane you heard daddy you

Peeking over her shoulder, Nabiki says, "Akane, you heard what daddy said.  
You shouldn't hit men for no reason.

now how do you plan to keep the principle from finding out about this
How do you plan to keep the principal

Nabiki holds out here hand
her

"OK Nabiki how much will it cost" Akane mutters as she digs out some money.

Okay, Nabiki, how much will it cost?"

"1,000 yen should just about do it" she smiles happily thinking of a small 
investment she had in mind "Daddy" she says quickly facing her

Add a period.  "Daddy,"

regains contiosness"

conciousness

"Yes Nabiki what ever's best." He mutters not quite shur on what accrued.

Whatever's best.  He mutters not quite sure about what just occured


"You know Akane a tomboy like you will never catch a man at this
Add a comma after Akane

rate" he sticks his tong out at her before

tongue

Putting thoughts to words he sits up forcing a wet cloth off his

his thoughts into motion,

face he then groans in pain <* 'id any one catch the listens plate on
license


"Hay every one I know who this guy is now" she quietly giggles from what she 
just learned.

Hey, everyone

Kasumi looks up from her spot next to the man after reapplying the cloth to 
his forehead "Oh, Nabiki, what is this mans name and what was

Add a period after forehead.   What is this man's name

he doing at our front door?" she politely asks from here sitting position.

from her

Their heads turn as they here Joe Black groans from the futon that he

Everyone turns as Joe black groans


his for head to keep him from sitting up
forehead

again. "Just lie and rest Mr. Black we have a doctor coming to take care of 
your injuries." Kasumi soothingly talks.

tells him.

"Just tell me one thing please ma'am." He groans in deeply accented 
Japanese. "First of where am I, second where is Fuurikan High and finally 
who the <* Smeg *> hit me that punch was really sloppy."

First, Where am I?  Second Where is Furinkan High and finally, Who hit me?  
That punch was really sloppy."

Nabiki shouts over here
her

A muffled conversation begins to take place out side the room.

outside

"The poor man he can berly speak any Japanese." Kasumi sighs

barely

Just then Genma pops in looks at the man lying on the futon and asks

pops in, looks at the man laying on the futon,

"I don't really know you would have to ask him but he doesn't really under 
stand us." Kasumi sighs shaking here head "Well I guess I should

understand us.  Kasumi sighs, shaking her head

go fix some tea for our new guest." She quickly gets up and leaves.


carry on the harriteag.)

heritage

He thinks smugly to him self

himself

a

at the possibilities that arise from having another who's man just as 
dedicated in martial arts as Ranma is but much more polite just what he 
needs now... but which daughter should he get this young man engaged to?

nother who is as dedicated to the art as Ranma is,and iss polite
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This wasn't bad.  The only thing I could say is to work on your spelling.  
Good luck!





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