In a message dated 7/26/99 03:20:29 AM, karaohki@snet.net writes:

"It's a deal, Ranma.  Friends it is."

I don't care how others may have pointed out that you had eliminated most of 
the potential headaches between Ranma and Akane in your fic, I'm still 
reading it. Probably because it's the only fic that I know off that actually 
_tried_ to pair them together _without_ all pre-ordinaried plot twists, 
hassles, etc. Seems that you're the only one with guts to post a fic deals 
with the relationship between R&A, while having eliminated most of the 
problems that would have eventually appered later on, leaving a new area to 
explore.
Maybe they'll get together or maybe not. They could have been destined to be 
together, or it was only the chaos that followed Ranma that brought them 
together. Take away the chaos, and will they still end up together (barring 
the destiny)?

You may have picked a relatively unpopular or plain concept to write out, but 
you have a something different here, I think. But even so, I would recommend 
that you wrap up your fic as quickly as possible, within maybe five or six 
parts. Any longer and you will run the risk of readers' interest in the fic 
tampering off. Unless you can introduce new conflicts into the mix.

Correction- Having reading the more recent responses to your fic, I was 
apparently mistaken in assuming that others would view it as 'unpopular'. 
^_^;;

The character Midori seems to be a good one to help add some spice to yoru 
story. You've already established that she is trying to help carry out her 
father's desire to marry Ranma, and is extremely retulucant to do so. Like 
Vega, I'd like to see a bit more about her as well.


Until I find something new to write, Ja ne-

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