For example, it's fairly ironic that the single greatest threat
to the stability and safety of Earth was not an extrajudicial demonic

extra judicial

force Ala. Queen Beryl, or an invasion fleet from another star like

'ala'

"The problem we have," continued the trainee girl turned rock
star and Knight Saber, "Is that he's probably already setting up some

Not sure of the punctuation and capitalization on this split sentence.
It looks wrong to me...  I leave it to Gary Kleppe to make the call.

"Actually, we do," interrupted lunar.

Luna-P

pilots (Complete with mecha), supercargoes, newly empowered videotape

'complete'.

rabbits as cute peaceful creatures-- unless they have read Warship
Down.

'Watership'

Incubi) or strangely distrubing for reasons no one can put their

'disturbing'.

Didn't Matter.  She was the best at what she did.

'matter'

Infiltration team Two was based on technological capability.

'Team'

complex puzzled requiring fluency in Sanskrit-- both written and

'puzzles'.

Faceless Minions were doing a very good imitation of a lawn.

'The' Faceless Minions

Team Four was pretty much whoever was left over.  Rathe than

'Rather'

starlights, a pack of howling cowboys, a half dozen neo-Amazons,

'Starlights'

"The only thing I have any problem with," continued Nodoka, "Is
all those girls making eyes at my husband.  If it weren't for the

Still wondering if that's the right way to handle a split sentence.
Another one for Kleppe.

"You think we can keep at least out fathers the way they are

'our' fathers

--- janet