--- Morgan Hudson <dataraven_659@excite.com> wrote:
Hi!
Hello :)
Well, I said it might get done today, and it was! As
always, PLEASE write me
with whatever you thought about this chapter, okay?
Ok
Deal!
I'd like to start off by recommending this series to
anyone interested in a good read. This story is one of
the best I've seen in a while, and it seems to only be
getting better. The author's style is practically
flawless and flows well, drawing readers into the
story. There's also enough action and humor to keep
you going, with a touch of WAFF and heavy emotion here
and there for those who like such fics. Every
installation even comes with a good 'yoroi' line
(In-joke).
You don't even have to be familiar with either of the
series to enjoy the fic. I barely know enough about
Sailor Moon and Yoroiden Samurai Troopers to get by,
yet I look forward to every chapter. You never even
have to wait long for the next chapter to come,
either.
So, if you're in the mood for a good story, 'Ronin
Summer: Homecomings' is the fic for you. (By the way,
Hudson-san, would you have a site for your works? If
you do, what is the URL? If not, I'll be glad to
archive your fics.)
Well, now that I'm done plugging, I'll get on with the
C&C.
Everything is IMO ^_^
BTW, as you may have noticed, I'm kind of stuck for
a title this time
around. If you have any good ideas, don't keep them
to yourselves! ^_^
I'm drawing a blank.
How about "The Hand is Quicker..."
It probably gives away too much, but I can't think of
anything else.
<...>
RONIN SUMMER 2 : HOMECOMINGS
A Sailor Moon / Yoroiden Samurai Troopers
cross-over
by Morgan Hudson
(dataraven_659@excite.com)
Part 6 :
<...>
Ryo blinked. "Oh, goody. So I miraculously have a
replacement
for my yoroi, and it might as well be a paperweight,
because nobody
gave me the DAMN MANUAL!"
This man deserves a refund.
Yeesh, strange, flowing crystals that give you
unbelievable powers just aren't what they used to
be...
<...>
Seiji scowled. "Psychic bond be damned! I WANT A
COOL-ASS
That guy was right. Adding 'ass' to an adjective in a
sentence really DOES enhance reading.
COMMUNICATOR! Did you know these things get the
Cartoon Network?"
<...>
"And she swims so bad, she NEEDS an air tank!" The
pig-tailed
girl standing next to Akane chuckled.
"The pig-tailed dolt is Ranko." Akane finished, and
scowled.
I'm not really sure, but I always thought Ranma used
his real name, even in girl form. The 'Ranko' thing
was just for his mother (correct me if I'm wrong)
There's really no need for him to hide his true
identity, and if there was, he could use his real
name.
<...>
Always, and I do
mean ALWAYS, make sure your gear is working properly
before you dive.
Twenty feet underwater is what we call a BAD place
To increase the impact of what he's saying, you might
want to add some feet to that twenty.
to find out your
air valve has a leak."
**********
Two hours later, Shin raised his hand for
attention. "Okay!
You've all been having some fun and trying out the
gear, but I want to
discuss something of importance here."
"What is it, Shin?" Rei asked, flicking a strand of
wet hair
behind her.
"An important skill, and one EVERYBODY needs to
learn. It's
what we call 'Buddy Breathing', and is one of many
reasons why
everybody should swim in pairs." Shin smiled a
little. "Rei, would you
care to help me demonstrate? Just come over here and
take off your
tank."
"Okay..." Rei slid the heavy metal air tank off of
her back
and waded over. "What now?"
"For practice sake, we're going to pretend that Rei
and I are
NOT in the shallow end of a swimming pool, we're
actually hundreds of
feet underwater. And something just went wrong with
Rei's air. Maybe
she has a broken valve, maybe she tore a hose, or
maybe for some
reason she lost her rebreather. If she were alone,
she'd be fish food
by now, but fortunately, she has a partner." Shin
smiled and pointed
to himself. Everbody was looking very serious, and
that was good :
this was vital life-saving information. But still...
"Hey Rei, are you paying attention? How can you
hear me with
all those coins in your ear?" Shin reached up and
apparently drew
three five-yen coins from the girl's right ear. The
group began to
loosen up, and Shin felt his grin stretch a little.
This can be improved upon. The way it is now seems a
little flat.
suggest: 'The heaviness of the mood almost visibly
lightened with his little trick, and some even smiled
a little. Shin felt his grin widen a little as he saw
the group beginning to loosen up.'
"That's right, the
hand is quicker than the eye. And in Buddy
Breathing, you need quick
hands. As soon as Rei signals distress, I have to
start helping her.
So I take a deep breath of my rebreather, like so,"
he demonstrated,
sucking deeply on the metal mouthpiece, "and,
holding my breath, offer
it to her. She does the same, and we share until we
can get back to
the surface."
You even learn useful things from this fic. If anyone
ever gets caught swimming in deep water with Rei Hino
without any air, you know what to do. ^_^
<...>
Rei walked over to Shin and smiled prettily. "So,
Shin... what
are you doing right now?"
I think we can pretty much guess where their
relationship is going. For once, I actually don't mind
all the characters in a crossover being paired up.
"Me?" Shin shrugged. "Not much. I have to meet Shuu
over at
his family's restaurant, and then head over to the
nearest SCUBA
supply store." He reached into his bag and pulled
out a rebreather.
"This rebreather isn't working : I think it might be
'rebreather' doesn't need to be repeated the second
time, Rei and the readers know what he's talking about
:)
clogged or
damaged. They're pretty expensive - I'd hate to have
to throw one away
needlessly, if it can be repaired."
<...>
"You're doing quite well, Mamoru Chiba." Anubis
smiled and
wiped the sweat from his forehead. "I haven't had
this good a workout
since Seiji no Korin and I last dueled!" He had
really felt those
last few hits, he noted. At this rate, he might have
to start using
his yoroi against Tuxedo Kamen if he wanted to win.
Hehehe. Tuxedo Kamen must really be getting good if
THAT has to be used.
<...>
Mamoru looked at his new sensei strangely, but did
as he was
instructed. "Why? I thought you told me that the hat
and cape served
only to restrict my movement and had no valid
purpose."
They went well with his shoes...
<...>
"Good point. Of course, I WANT to draw their
attention, don't
I? I mean, if they're attacking me, then they aren't
attacking Usagi."
AND they're dazzled by his sharp dressing.
"True, but if you vary your attacks, then at least
they
won't know what to expect from you." Anubis smiled
and pointed. "Let's
start with the hat. How heavy is it? Is the brim
sharp?"
Mamoru removed the headgear in question and
examined it for
the first time. "Yes... the brim is like a razor.
Why didn't I ever
notice that before?"
I'm wondering that too, myself...
"You weren't paying attention." Anubis grinned.
A pretty flimsy excuse, but I guess it works...
"So, how's
your aim, Tuxedo Kamen?"
"Have YOU ever tried to throw a flower at someone?
Roses
aren't exactly aerodynamic."
Heh. I'll have to remember this one...
"Very good. And the next time a youma thinks you're
reaching
for a rose, what are you going to do?"
Understanding dawned in Mamoru's eyes. "I'm going
to throw my
hat at him."
"See? Five seconds of strategy, and you already
have a new
attack to show for it." Kujuurou nodded as he saw
the light in
Mamoru's eyes. It was eagerness, and he could tell
Mamoru was already
coming up with ways to work his hat into future
attacks. Kamis, but
this boy was a GENIUS when it came to fighting!
But he doesn't know his own clothes. An idiot savant
is more like it.
"Now, let's discuss your roses..."
Tuxedo Kamen: What, do you think carnations would go
better with the suit?
**********
Shuu Rei Fuan massaged the back of his neck. "So
anyway," he
said, continuing his story, "Touma told me he didn't
want to work at
the Golden Dragon all summer because he didn't need
the money. Then
yesterday he calls me up and says he WILL work
there, but not until
next week. What's up with him?"
Rei smiled as she sipped her soda. "He's got a
grilfriend."
girlfriend
However, 'grilfriend' could work, depending on the
menu at Golden Dragon.
<...>
Rei laughed and shrugged. "All I know is my
friend Makoto gets
a really goofy smile ever time we mention him. Of
ever-->every
course, no matter
what we're talking about, she always finds a way to
mention him. And
then she sighs in this really disgusting way."
Michiru followed soon after. "NEPTUNE PLANET
POWER!" Well, she
thought as she transformed, so much for going a
whole day without
people staring at us...
'so much for going a whole day without people staring
at us'? Their secret's out! The other one.
<...>
Shin and Rei walked hand in hand, just like any
other two
schoolchildren might, and for a few brief minutes
they forgot. Forgot
about yoroi, and transformation pens. Forgot about
Senshi and Samurai,
forgot about youma and youja. For a few brief
minutes they forgot who
they really were, and pretended they were normal.
'pretended' makes it sound like they didn't forget.
Maybe 'acted like' would work better.
"So," Shin said slowly, "do you feel like telling
me the
REAL reason you've been tailing me? Because unless
you've developed a
crush on me over the past day, I'm stumped."
Rei shrugged. She may as well tell him... "The
Yoroiden have
been getting attacked lately. Some kind of silver
robots. They've
already taken out Seiji and Ryo, and Touma just
barely got away. When
I saw you were teaching my SCUBA class, I thought I
may as well keep
an eye on you. In case they went after you next."
Shin: Wait...Does that mean you DON'T have a crush on
me?
"Seiji and Ryo are BOTH out of action?" Shin
whistled in
amazement. "Well, so much for the Yoroiden : we're
boned. Where is
C'mon, you did this one on purpose...Admit it.
everybody?"
<...>
The robot leaping into the middle of the street put
a stop to
Rei's excuse. It was large and silver, just like Rei
had been warned,
and she quickly pushed Shin behind her. "Stay back!
It's after your
yoroi!"
Well, folks, there's the 'yoroi' line of the day.
Strange robot...
She charged forward, and was rather embarassed when
the machine
simply reached out and grabbed her by the neck. Shin
So her face was turning blue and red at the same time?
=P
was looking back
and forth between Rei and, for some odd reason, the
canal. The machine
began to tighten its grip, and Rei gurgled as her
last trickle of air
was cut off.
<...>
Shin cupped the yoroi in both hands, and looked up
at the
creature. The blue glow lighting his face made him
look almost demoic
as he grinned in a strangely sinister manner.
Scratch that. THIS is the 'yoroi' line of the day.
<...>
Shin Mouri began to giggle. "Sure I did... just
like I pulled
fifteen yen out of your ear this morning." Pulling
his left hand out
of his jacket pocket, he showed her the gleaming
blue yoroi.
"The hand is quicker than the eye, remember?"
Shin's eyes
sparkledwith amusement as he looked at Rei. "Those
sparkled with
robot things are
going through a lot of trouble for a slightly used
SCUBA rebreather."
Nice...I never would have guessed.
Rei chuckled despite herself. "You know what? Those
robots
AREN'T going to be very happy when they get back
here are they?"
"This would be why I suggest a rapid retreat." Shin
cast a
worried glance behind him. "Ryo's cabin, you said?"
Rei nodded. "Ryo's cabin. Do you know where it is?"
Shin shrugged and tilted his head to one side as
they ran.
"Well, not exactly... but under the circumstances
I'm damn well willing
to find out!"
TO BE CONTINUED...
Another good chapter. Keep up the good work ^_^.
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