Donny Cheng wrote:
Akane shook her head with disgust at the display by her father and
Uncle Saotome. Honestly, they turn into mindless zombies the moment
Happosai steps into the room.
More like fear-stricken cattle than mindless zombies.
With how they were behaving, one wouldn't
know it from looking at the two of them that they once had the gumption
to take down the old pervert.
That's awkward. I'd reword it, but exactly how is eluding me.
Akane watched as the listless amazon sat at the counter, apparently not
in the least bit interested in what she was cooking. It jarred her to
see this. Despite her denial of Shampoo's claims on her, Akane had to
admit that having the girl around did wonders for her self-esteem.
Yeah. Not like when those yucky boys come onto her. ^_^
With Shampoo, Akane knew exactly where she stood and was often put in
'her place' with a crack on her knuckles with anything the amazon had on
hand. Whether it was cooking or sparring, when Akane did something
wrong, there was no hesitation in the punishment she would received.
receive
She blushed suddenly as she recalled that the 'rewards' were also
swift. Shampoo was a very affectionate person and preferred to show
that affection physically.
Too true.
the most delicate of things and many places on Akane's body still
smarted from the various pats and pinches. Though her bottom seemed to
be getting quite used to it as it didn't turn red quite a quickly now.
It's like the Breaking Point technique, only more specialized in the
location of the built up immunity to 'damage'.
"I guess that's what I said," Akane answered, not sure of herself.
"I'll learn it in a month and speak better than you did Japanese."
"Shampoo bet no can happen. Akane do what Shampoo say if lose."
Well now, this is a set up if ever I heard one.
"Akane prude," Shampoo rolled her eyes. "Let's start with easy stuff.
'Wo shi xiao xi'."
"That's easy. I've been around you long enough to know that much. I
am Akane,"
Shampoo: Actually, that mean, 'I have a yellow pencil.'
"Very good," Shampoo nodded approvingly. At least the girl had a brain
even
brain, even
"Oh, Akane find it cute?" Shampoo asked teasingly, eliciting a blush
>from the girl. Of course she
course, she
"Feh. Sham... I can if try," Shampoo said distinctly. She supposed
she really should give it some effort. It had been tough trying to
learn Japanese the past month to get to where she was at right now. It
was as Akane said, most people did find her way of speaking cute and
Ranma did not seem to mind, so she didn't bother putting up to effort to
correct herself. The things she did to please Akane sometimes. It did
good
'did good' sounds a bit awkward. Maybe 'It served her purpose to let...'
to let the girl win in some arguments, Shampoo found. Akane would
smile more often, as she was doing now. So cute.
Aww. How sweet.
* * * * *
"'Wo yao bei sui'... hmm, I want water?"
Shampoo: No. 'I have a veneral disease.' Can Akane no get it right?
Akane nodded and jotted the new word down on a piece of paper. She
should have done this sooner as the test Shampoo was giving her was
getting harder. Words that had only been mentioned once during the day
were now being used. She sighed when Shampoo motioned at the cup of
water in front of her. The
extra space between the period and 'The'
Shampoo smiled lecherously as she got up off the chair and slinked her
body to the bed where Akane's lay. "Akane just ask me to kiss. I must
obey."
Devious little thing. ^_^
"I knew it you'd pull something like this. It's not fair!" Akane
yelled out holding
out, holding
Shampoo rolled her eyes when she saw Akane's clenched eyes with her
fists held in read
in a ready
position. *Am I that undesirable?* Still, Shampoo
was still quite
drop one of the 'still's
surprised the girl went along with it. She felt guilty
at what she implied
had implied
Shampoo looked up at Akane's question. She saw the girl's face soften
for a moment into a worried expression before it went back to its
regular scowling whenever she was around. "Nothing. I coming."
Whoa! That was quick. They haven't even kissed yet. ^_^
Akane closed her eyes again and she didn't have to wait long before she
felt the girl's lips upon her own. *I should bite her tongue is
if
"And what exactly will happen when Misu does win?" Nabiki asked,
dreading the answer.
It means lots of whips and chains.
"Uh, sorry," Ranma apologized, though her eyes remained riveted to the
bouncing flesh trapped in leather. She was disappointed when the show
was over in under a minute and Misu put her robe back on and went back
to wiping down the tables.
Mousse has gotten fun for you to write, I see.
Cologne rolled her eyes and wondered if her great-granddaughter knew
Ranma might more
might be more
"Chefs have to eat some time. Isn't that right, Misu?" Ukyo asked as
the blushing waitress walked by.
Cologne sighed and ignored the following cat and mouse game that had
taken place ever since a couple of day ago when she had picked Misu off
the streets and started the girl as her waitress.
Ohhh. Ukyou and 'Misu'? This is gonna be good. ^_^
skyrocketed ever since she also publicly announced she didn't have a
boyfriend and was not interested in them. This just made everyone want
her even more."
"I want what I cannot have," eh?
"I am your fianc�e after
fiancee, after (I think)
* * * * *
"Ucchan!" Ranma exclaimed as she swallowed the okonomiyaki. It wasn't
that best she had tasted, but the homemade sauce could have only come
>from one person. The fact that a name was written with sauce on the
okonomiyaki also helped.
Just a little.
"I understand, Ranma. Now, let's slow down. We can't just go running
all over the place. My place isn't too far from here. The walls are a
bit thin though, so maybe we could to go a little hotel I know that's
not too far from my restaurant. We'll have to stop by my place to get
my toys though."
Heh. I think I like this version of Ukyou. ^_^
"Ah, habit I've picked up over the years," Ukyo laughed heartily.
Ranma blinked and took a good look at her old friend. Her friend
the two uses of 'her' and 'friend' are a little too close together. I'd
just say 'Ukyou' for the second
Ranma blushed as Ukyo flipped up her shirt and tried to slide a hand
into her skirt.
Heh. Real forceful personality.
* * * * *
Ukyo giggled as everyone crowded around her asking her about Ranma.
Overnight, she had become the most popular girl in the playground. Too
bad she had to leave in the middle of the night. Parents didn't seem to
like to go to their okonomiyaki yatai anymore when boys started playing
marriage with boys and girls with girls after hearing about her
engagement with a soon-to-be girl.
Hehehehehe. Oh that is rich.
"Now, that's sweet. Sakura, but I already have a...." Before Ukyo can
could
"Did I say nights? I meant that 'night'. Hehehe," Ukyo laughed
unconvincingly.
Very wicked. A very unusual twist to Ukyou, but its appropriate given the
nature of this fic. ^_^
"Come on, Kodachi," Ukyo said, grabbing hold of Kodachi's arm before
she can
could
"I don't think you should worry about Kodachi. I'm sure it was all a
misunderstanding," Ranma said soothingly.
"Oh?"
Ranma: She's my bitch now.
Ranma was at a loss with how to deal with this current situation. It
would have help
helped
a lot if she was not attracted to Ukyo,
Has there yet been a case where Ranma wasn't attracted to a girl in this
fic?
which was
certainly not the case. "How about a date? To get to know one
another. See if were
we're
<Slap>
Ranma blinked as she suddenly found herself with the flat of her hand
slapped against Ukyo's face. "Ucchan! I'm sorry. I don't know what
happened. One moment I was, um, enjoying myself and the next minute, I
heard you use the male version of 'I' and then whammo."
Heh. This is a nice angle. One I wouldn't have thought of.
"Ukyo...," Ranma said as she looked at her fianc�e's sad gazing off
into the distance not looking at her.
If she's gazing off into the distance, I think we can assume Ukyou's not
looking at Ranma.
*First Akane, then Ranma,* Shampoo thought. Akane was the more
stubborn of the two and would take the most work. The youngest of the
Tendos, from the days they had spent together, had a jealous streak and
would be harder to be made see
made to see
the light if Shampoo were to take Ranma
first. It would be better to take Akane and then the both of them gang
up on Ranma.
Sound strategy.
"A cute little redhead," Ukyo whispered mysteriously.
"Redhead... die!"
Heh. And so it begins again
"I have no problems with that. I don't mind being a mistress. Problem
solved. Good night."
The path of least resistance indeed.
Nabiki imagined a hundred daggers flying through the air and stabbing
into Ukyo
extra space between into and Ukyou
"Ah," Ranma sighed, defeated. She really should have paid more
attention to her father when he taught her the joys and rewards of
lying. She looked up and saw that even Kasumi wore a disappointed
look. "Punish me."
Ohhh. This should be fun.
"And so you thought you could barge in here like you did right now,"
Akane said, pointing to the broken door hanging loosely on its hinges.
Heh. Nice touch.
"Akane do not know what seducement is?"
"Seducement? And that makes it sound so much better?"
Well, yes.
Still managing to keep it amusing. I'm just curious as to how much longer
it can last, though. Worth the time to C+C though. No question about that.
D.B. Sommer