Hope this isn't too late to be useful....
Ranma cut off Akane's words with a fierce kiss as she melted into
his
embrace. He stopped to catch his breath and stared into his
wife's
eyes.
"Lock the door," Akane whispered.
So they were sleeping with it unlocked?
No, they're in the dojo! Ranma was looking all over for Akane, and
found her practicing there...
Practising what?
"Kasumi will be just fine, Ranma. I've got it under control."
Weird character at the end of this line.
oops. Will find.
If it helps: I saw nothing.
That weekend saw the last two performances of the Sailor Moon play.
When everyone gathered together the last night, it was announced
that
the next play produced would be Romeo and Juliet. More than one
person suggested that Akane try out for Juliet's role, but all she
would do was laugh and shake her head.
"No thank you. No more plays for me."
Oh well. Ranma will have to take that part, then. :)
*Refrains from hitting her friend. "I will NOT hit Gary, I will NOT
hit Gary*
When i first saw that line i thought you meant Gary Oak, not Gary Kleppe!
Shiro and Shampoo sat outside their tent, looking up at the stars.
It
was hard to believe that the day before they had been on a Japanese
beach, and tonight they were in a Chinese forest.
Shiro and his classmates had spent their entire day following their
instructor around while he picked various medicinal plants and
explained their usefulness. Shiro had filled his notebook with
sketches of the plants and taken extensive notes.
I'd like to see more of the Shamps/Shiro relationship -- if not
here,
maybe in some later chapters. We know that they love each other, but
apart from that with the main concentration of the series on Ranma
and
Akane, there hasn't been much exploration of these two's specific
feelings for each other.
I'll work on it.
Personally I think he's somewhat incorrect
Beside a fire in another part of China, a man sat making a list.
Right now it would be unwise for him to return to Japan. The
Japanese
authorities were notorious for their tenacity when it came to
searching for people, and he didn't want them to find him. He
would
have to wait before he could go back and take his anger out on the
people who were responsible for separating him from Shampoo.
The more he thought, the longer the list became.
Here's something else I'd really like to see expanded on -- Mousse's
view of this whole situation. I don't mind seeing him driven to the
dark
side, as it were, but I'd really like to see inside his head enough
to
understand what's driving him.
You'll see a lot of that. I want to re-cap how he feels about what's
been happening to him for years, and why he feels so put-upon.
Thanks--you're not the only person who has requested this.
Also, you said he was making a mental list: Try listing some!
Ranma was silent as the two went down the stairs, and continued to
say
nothing even after they had walked several blocks. Ryoga just
waited.
He knew what was coming. Finally Ranma began to talk.
"I'd appreciate it if I wouldn't find you alone with my wife
again."
What brought *this* on? This was the one reaction in the fic that I
didn't get. If it's just that Ranma is worried about Akane
discovering
the P-chan secret, I think he wouldn't have to be this cold about
it.
Not so much the P-chan thing as his reaction to seeing them laughing
together when he walked in the door. He's become very possessive of
his wife, and he knows Ryoga still cares.
"When's the last time you saw Akari?"
"I can't remember."
"You should go see her."
"Yeah. Bye."
Yeah, right. He *would* go there if he could FIND Akari. Can't Ranma
help him get there, or at least call Akari and ask her to meet him
at
the station?
Interesting thought. Perhaps I can have Ranma regretting that he
didn't do so--later.
Akane rushed her way through the chores of washing the dishes and
cleaning up the kitchen. She had plans for Ranma when he got back.
She ran into the bedroom, pulled something from one of the drawers,
and jumped into the shower.
Uh oh... Akane's been reading Cosmo....
*Nod. Yup!*
Thanks, Gary.
June
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