Well, this was a nice p�ece of work. I like the title.
And Ranma. With Musabetsu kakuto more advanced than in the same
point in canon, Hiten mitsurugi ryu AND Xelloss-quotes, can you get any
cooler?
..Wouldn't this make Kenshin Ranma's great-grandfather?
IF the HMR is a Kenshin reference, then wouldn't Nodoka be the heir
to the Kamiya Kasshin Ryu too? or maybe there were two children, with
different teachers...
I would presume that Kuzu Ryu Sen and Ama-kakeru Ryu no Hirameki have
been lost, since teaching the techniques means the death of the predecessor.
I presume, that with Nodoka, the situation in Amazon village went better
than originally,
and maybe the competition between Ranma and Ryoga happened earlier (year or
two)
with Ryoga learning the Shishihokodan( not the perfect form, since he
wouldn't have
been able to get depressed enough ) and Ranma creating the Mokotakabisha as
the result( Remember, Moko takabisha is Ranma's unique tech ).
Ranma and Ryoga probably departed in friendly terms.
Btw, since using Shishihokodan leads to vicious circle of depression,
wouldn't using
the Mokotakabisha eventually lead to utter overconfidence?
Did Cologne teach Ranma anything while in the Amazon village?
She seems like a character to hate wasting potential in fighters.
( Remember, the first thing she did after entering nerima was building up
Ranma's speed. If she hadn't demonstrated the Amaguriken training,
Ranma probably would have been in the amazon village before volume 8! )
No, she wouldn't have become a lesbian. Ranma's terribly prude ( Remember
the
Tsubasa Kurenai story. )
Now, you seem to have the tendency to write slightly 'slurry', omitting the
ends in
words. Eg. burn instead of burned, form/forms.
Also, 'worse' was often misspelled as 'worst', and Ranma started to speak
pigdin
in one point.(stopped later, luckily ^^).
Still, an entertaining fic. Akane seemed to forget the issue of both
families practising
Anything-goes, but then again, so did I, until I checked back a bit. ^^
With all the posts You've been doing lately, I can see your writing keeps
improving,
though this was not as good as the last of your post I read. Were you tired
when writing this?