Alright folks, I hate to bother you with something that is not a fic, not
spam, not C&C, etc. This is a simple outline for a fanfic I'd like to do and
before attempting it, I'd like your input onto what could be improved,
scrapped, etc. Well.... away we go...
-Ten years ago, a murder was committed on a lost island (see title in line)
-The murdered victim was the king whom had ruled for over four thousand years.
-The inhabitants are faced with great difficulties as a new king must be
found.
-A young boy from the West is chosen.
-Three years later Ranma and Genma (during the mysterious training trip) wash
up on the island.
-Genma trains Ranma in some areas on the island and incorporates some of the
local style.
-Because of shadowy doings Genma and Ranma are forced to leave the island and
part of Ranma's memory of the island is destroyed.
-Before they leave, the young king implants a message directly into Ranma's
subconcious.
-This message is you will return.
-They events as we know them take place in Ranma's life and the adventure is
almost completely forgotten by Ranma, almost. It seems his father is
forbidding Ranma from using some moves. These techniques are "simple" combat
manuevers that are found on the island. Genma has his reasons and refuses to
share them. Ranma practices them only when he can. Ranma continues in this
because he feels they are sound manuevers. The rest of the storyline is
unchanged.
Time now: Somewhere after the two movies (Big Trouble in Nekonron and Nihao
My Concubine) and before any of the later events (Saffron, Herb, Taro, etc.)
-Ranma begins to have mysterious dreams where two "piercing green" eyes stare
at him and the words "you will return" batter his mind.
-Ranma also begins to practice the manuevers more often and has started
figuring out more of them going along with that style. Genma knows nothing.
-One day a mysterious boy (I know overused plot device, but hey, it works.)
appears at the dojo. He appears and looks for anyone who practices the
martial arts. Akane, Ranma, Genma, Soun, and Happosai (who is currently
there) all say they practice the art. The boy smiles and challenges them
all, one on one to a battle. He throws a meaningful at Genma through his
"piercing green" eyes. Genma starts to back out, but He is up first. As per
the rules, no one is allowed in the training hall except the boy who has not
identified himself and his opponent.
-A side note, while this boy (who in case you haven't figured it out, is the
king of the island) is a superb warrior, he is no superhero. He is on par
with Ranma, but isn't so powerful that a mere glare with blast Ranma into
stardust.
-Genma is defeated more by his fear of the past (which will not be revealed
yet) than by his opponent. (In other words this is more of a pyschological
battle than anything else.)
-Akane who is second, is just trounced. She is not on par with Ranma or any
of the other super-martial artists in Nerima so she cannot put up decent
fight, especially against a style so alien.
-Soun is next, and is the challenge Genma should have been. (In other words,
no breezing through this as he did with Akane.)
-Happosai follows and has (in his travels) witnessed his opponent's style. A
long fight ensues with no one clearly above anyone else until Happosai slips
when the boy retreats. The kid uses this slip to work into Happosai and keep
going.
-Ranma is last and they are even. Ranma should win, except he is complete
stymied by the other guy's words. These words throw him off balance long
enough for a solid hit, and then a fully sunk in choke. (For those of you
who don't know anything about Ju-jitsu or anyother grappling, a fully and
well done move is almost impossible to escape. The better your opponent is,
the harder it is for you to escape. Trust me on that.)
-The boy then leaves and Ranma is obsessed with finding and defeating him,
but also what he meant with his words. Genma doesn't want Ranma to go and is
forced to follow.
-They track the king to a ship that has left the harbor but find another one
headed to the same destination of the other ship.
-The ship they are on is actually a ship from their island and they are
forced to ashore on the island.
-When they arrive on the island they are again confronted by the king and
they learn of his mysterious identity, the history of the island, why they
are involved, and the current state of affairs.
-The current state of affairs is that the regent who is ruling till the king
comes of age has upsurped power from the rightful ruler.
-The king has brought in the greatest martial artists in the world, which he
felt would help the cause. Ryouga wanders into the event.
-Ranma is dubious until he finds out the king has complete control over the
island while he is in power. He can change and weave the fabric of reality
on the island, including magicking a spring for a little while...
-The warriors, (including Ryouga, who agreed for the same reason Ranma and
Genma did), head for the castle.
-After some battles, the king and the regent face off.
-The regent falls but the real villian is revealed.
-The real villian cannot be harmed by anyone from the island.
-While the current king isn't from the island, he is now a part of it.
-Ranma faces off in single combat against the true villian.
-Ranma wins.
-The king is restored to power and magics the spring, but to prevent any
unnesscecary accidents, it is only good for three uses.
-They head to the spring only to see a sloth fall in. A man emerges.
-With only two uses left, they fight over who will go in. As they fight a
lizard and bird enter the water. The emerge as men.
-They finally decide with Ranma and Ryouga going in, but lo! The emerge as
they're cursed forms. It is then Genma notices the three naked men beyond
the trees.
-They realize they're mistake and go to see the king.
-The king sympasizes with them but will not change the fabric of the land
anymore. They had their chance and greed prevented them from taking it. The
king hopes for them to learn from their lesson. He doesn't however send them
home empty handed. He offers to teach them some of the island's special
attacks. They each learn one and are then returned to the main land.
-The fanfic ends with Ryouga getting lost as Ranma and Genma begin to tell
their tale...
That's it. I am interested in your comments and any ideas you think might
work. Thank you for your time.
~The King of Ducks
Justin Rod
"The Mindsword spun in the dawn's gray light
And men and demons knelt down before.
The Mindsword flashed in the midday bright
Gods joined the dance, and the march to war.
It spun in the twilight dim as well
And gods and men marched off to hell."
-Fred Saberhagen