Subject: [FFML] Re: [Ranma][Shortfic]
From: Shunsuke
Date: 2/10/2000, 12:37 AM
To: ffml@fanfic.com

Hi,

Normally I send C&C directly to story authors, but in this case 
it might help others who missed the key point of his story.

The storytelling in this needs work; the descriptions and set up 
are not the best, especially crucial in shorter works.  Toward the 
end as the author gets to the point he's trying to make, it flows 
better and the telling is dead on.

As for the point?  The author does not say it, but this is a dark 
fic; think of the Bill Murray movie "Groundhog Day" without ever 
waking up to "the next day".  What greater hell could one person 
endure except the same thing over and over again for the rest of 
his life, or even eternity?  That's what the fourth decendant of 
Ryouga implies; Ranma may be able to defeat each and every single 
Ryouga who appears, but that doesn't matter.  It's not a punchline, 
it's a curse.

Of course, that's just my own point of view. ^_^


Shunsuke


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