While procrastinating on a paper I decided to do some C&C to get my mind
off the femme fatale archetype:
Re:[FFML] [fanfic][TM!] Vacation Days Chapter 9
by: DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net>
Comments: Another fine installment of Vacation days. Ryouko and Ayeka
continue to be comic relief while Mihoshi manages to be serious and
remain In Character. You might be killing people off a little too fast,
however, especially considering the amount of time you spent building
them. I like how what might have been a silly series turned into a very
serious one without any loss of the story's flow. Characterization and
formatting are fine and Stargrave's past is a nice touch. Highly
recommended.
Re:[FFML] [Fanfic][R1/2][Fusion] The Saotome Gambit Part 5
by: Jamie and Bridget Wilde <wildeman@psn.net>
Commentary: An excellent series so far (I'd've sent C&C earlier but I'm
lazy) and one of the better fusions I've read (the other was the
Rannma/2001 fusion by the same pair of authors). Characterization more
than exceeds my expectations and the universe is _very_ well fleshed
out. I've honestly never seen a more seemless integration of characters
and settings between such dissimilar sources. The interplay between
Akane and Rannma is close to perfect; I can see a relationship like that
forming which has always been a problem with other Rannma fanfics. The
technical information is fascinating and as one who used to write
Battletech fiction I can truly say you have a talent for this kind of
thing.
Highly recommended; easily my favorite fic involving Rannma
Re:[FFML] [FFML][BGC][2090][Correct Darft]A Knight Alone -Chapter 6
by:"Alex Gray" <hitomi@ndirect.co.uk>
Comments: Formatting and grammar/spelling mistakes common in part six
and rough draft of part seven. A good preread would definately clear up
these problems, and I'll send detailed C&C separately in a day or two.
Aside from these points everything is proceeding well, with the
characters fleshing out nicely. Linna has come alive, Priss seems a
little bit too weak(some of her dialouge comes off as OOC) but recent
events could have an impact on her, Sylia's still off her rocker (the
clone stuff is great) Sam's character is getting more and more evil and
the plot is gearing up. I wonder when you're going to return to 2090?
Jerico