At 04:06 PM 2/22/00 -0500, Jed M Bidwell wrote:
Ranma 1/2: A Murder of Crows
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Questions? Comments? Love to hear em!
Okay. This probably isn't what you want to hear, but...
I feel like I've read this before.
I've seen at least two other Ranma/Crow fusions, and so far,
the only substantial difference between this and the others is
that it's Akane rather than Ranma who's doing the reincarnation
thing. That's just not enough to interest me, when everything
else, from the scenes themselves right down to the choice of
words, is so similar.
I don't mean to imply that you're a bad writer; you're not.
The chapter is more than competent. I just don't enjoy it as
much as I otherwise might, because in my mind, it doesn't
distinguish itself enough from those other previous fics.
I'm not sure just how much of a problem this is; I've been
reading fanfics for a long time, and the others were both a
while ago, even though they made an impression on me. If
you're troubled by it, I'd suggest trying to establish
your fic's "identity" -- what are the differences that set
it apart from others with a similar concept? -- earlier on.
Or not. <shrug> It does, as I mentioned, seem quite well
written.
Scott Schimmel Ex ignorantia ad sapientium;
Ex luce ad tenebras
"You really aren't normal, are you?" - Miki Koishikawa