In the middle of this, another girl walked up in a Furinkan
uniform, and Ranko and Akane did a double-take. It was Shampoo.

"Shampoo! What are you doing here?" asked Ranko, smiling.

Shampoo smiled too. "Great-Grandmother make good on threat, send
Shampoo to school.

question.. how did Shampoo get inroled in school.. I mena she has no prior refferences. so she .. argh.. you know she should acctually have to take a test or something to show how much she knew before she could atend classes.

She was still trying to figure it out ten minutes later.
Something... about the red beans and rice. Now, when was the last
time Kasumi served red beans and rice? Wasn't it when I...
Akane's eyes widened and she dropped her chopsticks. Everyone
looked up.

Was wondering when this issue would be brought up. Strange taht Ranma never get periods in the manga though. I mean he is in a girls body and there should be a chance that he could get a period during this time.
another question. doesnt girls have theese, juices? no not that I mean it some kinda a body fluid that they get even ealyer than they get there period.

Ranko looked at Ryouga. He seemed very nervous for some reason.
Probably he still thinks of me as a boy, she thought. That
probably made him really uncomfortable holding me...

GET THE HELL OUTHA THERE RYUOGA!

"Fair Akane! Pig-tailed girl! I have but just returned from my
family's private isle! Oh, how my heart has ached to see you, my
loves!"

Yay! Kunou-baby is back

Ranko dodged, trying desperately to keep her uniform clean. It
was all she could do to avoid the clubs, razor hoops, and whips.
When she had been at her top form, it was a snap, but now, trying
to dodge and not ruin her uniform, it was barely within her
capacity. And she knew she would start to tire soon. Either she
would ruin her uniform, or she would be hurt.

question. doesnt this aply for Akane to? or maybe its because Kodachi is much harder than any of the Oponents Akane has been able to beat.

It was a good thing Ranko was holding the unconscious Akane, as
she served as support when Ranko fainted, too.

Ranma fainting? okay now I reall yam conviced that she is changed.
but in fact the fainting is just a myth. it is due to the lack of Oxygen to the brain . for example if you dont eat propelly if you bathe in th esun with out having eaten. if you wear VERY tight dresses. fainting merly by shock? oh my..



well this part that I will show now is the part you should rewrite cause this part is REALLY bad:

Ranko nodded, and looked off into the distance. "I... well, when
Mother was telling me I was her daughter, I... I just couldn't
believe her. At first I thought she must be mistaken, that she
wasn't my mother after all. But even after she convinced me she
was, I thought she must be... you know... crazy or something."
She blushed. "I mean, I knew I was a boy until Jusenkyou. I... I
had forgotten about being a girl." She looked pensive for a few
moments. "Even though I... I felt like I wanted to be a girl,
that I didn't like being a boy, I thought those feelings were
wrong, bad,... perverted. You... you taught me to prize my
manhood, to hold it up over everything else." She smiled
uncertainly. "You taught me well; I fought back against what she
was telling me as hard as I could.

"She showed me photographs, she even showed me home video of
Akane and I having a tea party with our dolls." She giggled, and
memories drifted up from the back of Genma's mind: he had taken
that video. "But then... she showed me my room, from when I was a
little girl, and there was this photograph of me holding up this
big c-cat, and I remembered. I remembered that, and I remembered
her constantly telling me not to do that, because it got... hairs
all over my dress." She shook her head. "I... I couldn't deny the
truth any more. She might be crazy, but... but now I remembered
being a girl myself. I couldn't deny that.

"Well, after that, I went to pieces really quickly. I had all
these bottled-up feelings inside, about hating being a boy,
wanting to be a girl. I could keep them under control when I
thought I was a boy, but once I found out I was really a girl,
I... I just couldn't do that any more." She started to sniffle a
little.

"I... I decided to tell Akane everything. What I was feeling, how
I felt about being a boy and being a girl. I had to tell someone,
and somehow, I couldn't imagine telling anyone else. Not even
Mother." She smiled through her tears. "Bless Akane's heart, she
showed me that she and Kasumi really are sisters after all. She
took me by the hand and never let go. She took me to Cologne and
Dr. Tofu, who showed me that I was lying to myself about how I
felt." She sighed shakily. "I tried holding out for another week,
until school was over. But I couldn't look at myself the same way
any more. When I saw my female form in the mirror, it stopped
being 'my cursed body' and started being 'me', just because I...
I knew it *was* me. I dreamed about being a girl. Finally, the
last day of school, the boys in the locker room pulled that
stupid stunt they sometimes do, turning cold water on me..." She
trailed off, and a look of fear came over her face.

Genma had never worried about Ranma being able to take care of
himself, but somehow, this revelation was making him very
nervous. "What... what happened?"

She broke out of her distraction, then gave a short laugh. "I...
I screamed my head off. This time, they weren't looking at some
cursed form, they were looking at *me*." She shivered. "I never
felt so violated before in my life."

Genma found himself nodding, saying "Yes? Go on..."

Ranko giggled. "Akane came to the rescue. She came right into the
boy's locker room to get me. She took me back to the girl's
locker room, and she and Ucchan finally got me to calm down." She
shook her head. "That forced me to face the truth; I wasn't going
to be able to close Pandora's box. All my female feelings were
coming out, and I couldn't stop them. Dr. Tofu had suggested I
spend summer break as a girl, and that night I decided to try it.
I wore some of the clothes I already had, and Kasumi styled my
hair. The next day I went shopping with Mother." She giggled. "I
thought we were going to buy out the whole store. I *still*
haven't worn that green formal dress..." She paused. "Akane and I
moved in with Mother for the summer. Mother... being with her
again, living at home in my old room, seeing her every day,
feeling her love... I... I never realized how much I had missed
M-Mother." Suddenly, there were tears in her eyes, and she
stopped speaking.

After a while, she wiped her eyes and continued. "She's even
teaching me how to cook." She thought for a few moments more.
"You know, after that, I never looked back. Cologne locked my
curse for me, temporarily, so I wouldn't change. Sayuri and Yuka,
Akane's friends from school, managed to find out what had
happened, and we spent time with them, and now... now they're my
friends, too. We went with them to Harajuku, we went to Hakone
and met some new friends from Yokohama there, we went to Ibaraki
with Sayuri and Yuka and Ucchan." She laughed. "Ryouga managed to
find us there, and after trying to kill me again, he found out
what was going on. He calls me 'Ranko-san' now." She smiled. "We
even went with Shampoo to Tokyo Disneyland."

His eyes bugged out. "With... Shampoo?!"

She nodded. "Yes, Cologne told me the Kiss of Death and the Kiss
of Marriage were both nullified, though she wouldn't say why.
She's helped me a lot, and Shampoo is attending Furinkan now.
She's my friend, too." She smiled. "Anyway, I... I never had such
a wonderful time in my life. I have so many friends now,
wonderful friends. The whole summer was like a dream, and I
didn't want to wake up. Being a girl, spending time with Akane
and other girls, I... I don't know why it made such a big
difference. I used to think it didn't matter. You know, if you're
a boy you're a boy, if you're a girl you're a girl; you just live
with whatever you are, and you could be happy either way."

She shook her head. "But that's not true. I learned this summer
that I had to be a girl to be really happy. I'm still not sure I
understand why, but I know it's true. Dr. Tofu says it's because
I was still a girl inside. Anyway, when the temporary lock on my
curse wore off, I discovered I couldn't stand being a boy any
more. I hated looking at myself in the mirror that way. And it
was a good thing, too. Cologne's magic had messed up Happosai's
spell, and within a week all the spells on me had broken. I was
just an ordinary, unenchanted, uncursed girl again." Her voice
became soft, and he could hear the emotion in it. "And that made
me so happy." For a minute, she didn't say anything.

"After... after that, it was time for school. Mother
re-registered me as a girl, and I stood in front of my class the
first day and told them my whole history. I thought I was going
to die, but I was surprised. A few people still didn't believe
me, but almost everyone has been wonderful. The girls have
completely accepted me, and almost all the boys, too. And... and
I like school, for the very first time. I like being with my
friends, with the other girls." She smiled a dreamy smile. After
a few moments, she said "I guess... that's about it."

He nodded. "What about the violin?"

Ranko smiled again. "I decided to take music as an elective this
term. During the first class, Sensei had us try out various
instruments, and when I tried the violin..." her voice trailed
off. "I... I felt something special. I really like playing the
violin. It's like it's playing me while I'm playing it." She
looked up at him. "You should come by and meet Kobayakawa-sensei
some time. I see her Fridays, right after school."

okay there that wa sthe part you should Rewrite.. see its just staing what has happened in the other chapters. I dont mind but its to much staing using almost the samewords all the time .. instead of telling everything you should only tell some and andd more parts that havnt been told like some important trivia on days we havnt seen.. oh and damn she giggles much. seemed to me you used the Giggless cause you also saw that this part was bad and needed something anchored to the present.

Once more, Genma was struckby the difference between Ranma and >Ranko. Had all this feeling,all this passion, all this love and >friendship, all these smilesand giggles, really been bottled up >inside Ranma? He felt evenmore guilty for what he had done. No, >Ranma wasn't gone. Parts of Ranma that he hadn't seen in twelve >years were visible again, and they were overshadowing the reticent >martial artist and son, the only facet of his child that he had >known.

okay Genma realises this far to easy and in much to plausable way.. I think it should take more time.
oh and now that he has his daughetr back I would see him take on a more Father to daughter role. like protecting( or trying) her from boys saying things like. boys only want one thing.. think that would fit Genma perfectly.

Ranko had rushed to the window. Sure enough, Father was standing
just inside the gates, watching as students passed him by on the
way home, looking as if he were unsure whether to come in or not.
She turned excitedly to Kobayakawa-sensei. "That's him!" She
opened the window, and was about to yell to him, then stopped.
Shampoo and Ucchan were stealthily approaching him from behind,
bonbori and spatula at the ready! What... what were they doing?
Ranko saw Shampoo preparing to spring. "Father! Look out behind
you!" He turned, in time to dodge Shampoo's first blow, barely.
He twisted as Ukyou's spatula whistled through the space where he
had been a moment before. She couldn't tell what they were saying
to him, but she could tell they were very, very angry and were
shouting. Her father was very skilled, but she didn't know how
long he could hold up against two martial artists like Shampoo
and Ucchan.

I like this whole part with Ranko wanting to protect her father.
I like all of it . I mean teh father daugher realtionship is always much more fun to rad about than the Father son, the mother son, or the mother daughter relationship.

Shampoo had other things on her mind. "Old Pervert listened to
them, do *that* to you -- when they *drunk*?!" Ranko nodded.
Shampoo fumed. Vengeance was not denied, just... redirected.
Fools were not punished; their folly was punishment enough. She
knew she could not take away Ranko's father if she loved him. She
would have to talk to great-grandmother; Happosai was a
formidable opponent. She couldn't take him on alone.

NO DONT HURT HENTAI-SAN! eh,, I mean Happosai. I have always seen him as the son I never had.. besides he didnt really want to do this..

Nodoka shook her head. "Sorry won't do. There is nothing you can
say, nothing you can do that will make up for what you did to me,
what you did to our child. You are not fit to be a father!" Genma
cringed. "Thank goodness she is old enough not to need protection
from you; I only wish I had been there to protect her from your
folly earlier." Nodoka shook her head. "She used to love cats,
now look at her. And that's only one thing out of many that you
did to her." She leaned forward slightly, her gaze intent. "You
listen to me. From now on, you are not making any decisions in
her life. Not where she goes to school or college, not what she
does with her life, not who she associates with, not who she
marries. Those will be between me and her."

Genma boggled. "But... but Nodoka... you can't do that!"

Nodoka glared. "I most certainly can, and I will. I've checked
with my cousin's husband, the lawyer, and if I pressed charges I
could have you sent to prison for abduction and child
endangerment. What court would sympathize with a man who would
throw a child into a pit of hungry cats? You've proven your
judgment is awful. But I won't do that, if you stop hurting her."
Her voice softened. "I... I won't keep you away from her. I know
she loves you, and I know," her voice faltered momentarily, "I
know you love her. You took a curse on to free her from hers."
She bowed her head and put her hands over her eyes. "It's just
that you are a fool, Saotome Genma, and I cannot stand seeing our
child suffer from that, not one more minute. I cannot let you
guide her any more." Genma was speechless.

ARGH!�Genma must feel like his heart is being teared out to never be able to be a real part of his little girls life. to have his wife threaten him. I think Genma would Rather have his head cut of than this faith.

They bowed to each other and began. Genma grinned. "Let's see how
rusty you've gotten, Boy! Er, Girl..." He attacked suddenly with
a kick, and was pleased to see that Ranko had indeed been
practicing. She wasn't where she had been, though, and after a
minute or two he saw an opening. He delivered a mighty kick, and
Ranko flew over to hit the wall of the Dojo, hard. She slid to
the floor. He smiled. Some serious practice would do her good. He
waited for her to leap back into the fight.

Except she wasn't leaping, just lying there. Finally, a moan
came: "Owwwww...", as she pushed herself up into a sitting
position with one hand. Nodoka jumped to her feet, anger in her
face, but Ranko held up a hand. She had clearly had the wind
knocked out of her. "S... S'OK, Mother. I'm OK. Really." Nodoka
sat back down, but still didn't look pleased. Genma looked on,
astonished.

Ranko pulled herself up the wall so she was standing again, and
turned to face her father, pain and confusion on her face.
"Father? Why... why did you hit me so hard? Yes, you penetrated
my defense, but... but you didn't have to hit me that hard to let
me know that!" He looked at the pain and hurt in her eyes, and
flinched. She... now he understood what he had seen yesterday,
what had bothered him when she and Akane had sparred. His
daughter was not fighting like a warrior, she was sparring like
an athlete. It was no longer an all-out, life-or-death battle for
her, but a sport, something she did for enjoyment. She hadn't
expected him to hit her hard, because... it wasn't a sporting
thing to do.

He spoke. "Ranko... if you were in a fight with a powerful
enemy... they would be trying as hard as they could to hurt you.
You have to be ready for that, and the only way to do it is to
experience it when you're training, by fighting as if your life
depended on it; some day, it will. This is something I taught you
when you were young; have you forgotten it?"

Ranko looked pained. Yes, her father had taught her that. But she
had gotten used to the sparring with Akane, and she was no longer
used to the no-holds-barred approach her father took. Suddenly,
she remembered Ryouga's face when he had attacked her on the
beach. The anger, the aggression... the hate. She shivered. "I...
Father, I... I'm not sure I want to fight like that any more.
I... I don't like it." She looked down. "I never really liked it.
I like sparring, but I don't like fighting..."

Genma's mind flashed back a dozen years...

Nodoka looked on with pride as her husband showed Ranko the
basics of the Art. She didn't want him to train her as a martial
artist, but thought it appropriate that Ranko understand this
important aspect of her father's life. If her father was an
aspiring martial arts master, she should learn a little bit about
it. Akane-chan was already eagerly learning from her father.

Genma went through the motions of several attacks, each time
showing Ranko how to defend herself. He repeated this several
times, then smiled at his daughter. "Now, sweetheart, are you
ready to try it for real?

Ranko nodded and smiled a huge smile. "Uh-huh! I'm ready, Daddy!
I can fight good, now!"

Genma attacked as gently as he possibly could, moving slowly so
she could react. Things went well for a few minutes, and then he
broke through her beginner's defenses and hit her lightly on the
side, just enough so she would feel it a little. He stepped back,
expecting to explain to her how she had left an opening, but was
stunned to find that she had collapsed on the mat and was
sobbing. "Sweetheart... what's wrong?"

She looked up at him. "You... you hit me, Daddy! You really hit
me! It... it hurt! Why did you hit me? Did I do something bad?
Are you mad at me?" Genma's heart twisted in knots.

Nodoka hurried over to her daughter and scooped her up. "No,
sweetheart. Daddy was just showing you how to fight like a
martial artist. When you practice that, sometimes you hit each
other. Daddy was just practicing with you; he's not mad. He loves
you." Ranko kept sobbing, as Nodoka gently held her. She looked
up at her husband. "Dear... I just don't think she has the
temperament for this. She's too sensitive, and she's not as
aggressive as Akane-chan. You know she never starts a fight."

Ranko looked up. "I hate fighting, Daddy! I don't wanna do it any
more!"

Genma swallowed, and walked over to his daughter where she stood,
looking down at her feet, and put a hand on her shoulder. "I
understand, Ranko. We'll... we'll just spar today, OK?" She
looked up at him in relief and nodded, and they continued.

Genma focused on keeping it to the level of aggression she was
expecting. As they fought, he worried. She was plenty skilled
enough to defend herself against any common criminal or attacker,
even another martial artist, even if they were a black belt. But
Ranma's enemies had never been common. And his child was no
longer following the path of the warrior. His heart sank.

After an hour or so, they stopped. He supposed he should be proud
of her; she was very skilled and an excellent student of the Art;
she could likely teach at an ordinary Dojo. But... he was
comparing her to Ranma, her previous self, and by that measure,
she fell short. Still, he couldn't make her into something she
didn't want to be any more; he would have to settle for what she
was willing to give. The thought of trying to drive her to do
better occurred to him, but then he remembered Nodoka's
ultimatum, and sighed. At least this way, he and his daughter
were still together, and... his head and his torso were still
together.

He made his decision. "You did very well. I'm glad to see you
have been conscientious in keeping up your training."

Ranko beamed. "Thank you, Father. That means a lot to me." She
blushed slightly. "Thank you for sparring with me. I'm still
trying to think of how to manage to spar with both of you,
without spending a lot more time on it. I guess I could spar with
Akane on weekdays and you on the weekend. What... what do you
think?"

I think it sucks. "Maybe that would work, child."

Poor Genma. it isnt so much that Ranko doesnt like to be a warrior but that all her fathers teachings all that he have thought her is at naught its like there is no Genma in Ranko anymore.

She smiled. "OK! I'm going to go wash up now. See you at
breakfast!" She turned and walked away.

And Genma couldn't help feeling she was walking away from the Art
as well.

I really like this whole sparring part It was really intersting and good.. poor Genma.

Genma was sitting on the porch reading the newspaper, when he
heard shouts of "I did it! I did it! I did it!" coming from the
Dojo. What are those two up to now? he wondered. Akane and Ranko
walked out a minute later, arm in arm.

Perverted refference Tank Police:

Leona> WE DID IT WE DID IT WE REALLY DID IT!!

AL> I DIDNT THINK WE COULD!

Chief> HEY I WONT ALLOW SUCH things In my ploice station!

AL> no were jsut celebrating

Chief> celebrahuh?

Leona> YES BECAUSE WE DID IT!!!

*facefaulth*

Chief> HUH!!!!

well I always wondered were Akane got those Damn Mallets from.. Personally I have always thought that mallets replesented a sort of chain. a chain made by men that was meant to restrain women and make them into something less. so I am always Perplexed when I see women willingly carrieng these shitty mallets.

Kunou rose to his feet; he had been sitting a few seats to the
right of Ranko. He turned to face the crowd, his face grim. "It
is with great emotion that I received the news of my father's
injury. I humbly implore you all to join me in expressing the
proper sentiments on this fateful occasion." He thrust his arms
into the air. "Banzai!"

The auditorium erupted into cheers.

I take it that Kunou-baby doesnt like his father very much..

Shampoo smiled a nasty smile. That sounded like a good idea to
use on the old freak.

NO DONT HURT POOR FREAK!

RUN HAPPI, RUN FOR TEH HILLS!

Happosai> OH hills! SWEETO!

okay that was all I had to share today.
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