Yes, lawrence, I DO happen to remember this series from Waay back when. And
all I can do after reading it is sit here laughing. This is one of the
better general Mecha save the earth parodies I've seen in a while... But it
seems to me like you repeated yourself (Unintentionally?) Right after our
hero steps through the portal...
Ah. Heres the passage:
***
You can imagine your own surreal vision of islands and wonder and
intrigue here. It doesn't take that much imagination.
Not that it'd matter, because Makiko didn't have anything like that
at all while going through the portal.
***
You can imagine your own surreal vision of islands and wonder and
intrigue here. It doesn't take that much imagination.
Now toss in a giant thing under a mosquito veil and a foot-high dwarf-
like creature, perhaps a table or desk here or there, and a ceiling,
and a bunch of really funky-looking gadgets/waldos/doodads/gizmos and you
have a vague idea of what Makiko saw when she stepped out of the portal. You
might want to add to your little imaginary composition
the small number of pebbles that lay at her feet.
Now, I realise that you were proboboly trying to make the distinction between
her uneventfull trip through the portal and what she saw when she came out.
To me, though, it just seemed confusing and that you had suffered some sort
of cut and paste error. Other than that, however, I personally couldnt find
anything bad about it....
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