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Interesting, nicely up to the usual standards of a story by "shehulk".
There really isn't much to comment technically, just the odd typo.
Still, while I think it *is* a good story, it seemed to be lacking
something (and I don't mean lemon content, which I noticed seemed to have
been toned down from the earlier stories of this series). I don't think it
was lack of Genom, because I firmly believe it's possible to write good BGC
fics without resorting to the Genom-bad cliches.
I'm having trouble putting my finger on just what it is that seems to be
missing. Perhaps it's that the story just seemed to peter out, rather than
having a real ending? Maybe I was looking for more, a solid "The End" to
things? Like I said, I don't know myself, so it's sort of hard to provide
any kind of concrete comment
But I did like the story ^_^
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