Subject: [FFML] Re: [ranma][slight xover] New Past, New Destiny
From: Video Game Addicted Person
Date: 4/18/2000, 8:32 AM
To: iolus merrick
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

Warning: first fic alert!! Theme and story has
probably been done before 
already.


     The theme isn't cliched as far as I know of
Ranma/DB crossovers, but the story needs a serious
polish, both in grammar and writing style. The only
thing I found interesting was that Ranma's female form
doesn't give him access to DB powers. I also strongly
recommend that other R1/2 characters to be powered up
as well; it wouldn't do to have Ranma completely
dominating his rivals. I hope you can fix these
problems in future chapters.

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