Overall, this was pretty good... a few suggestions, however:
- The name "Violante" strikes me as way too obvious, and distracted from the
story. If this character is violent you should show, not tell, us how violent
she is.
- IMO, it would've been better to introduce the villagers sooner, and save
Ranma's recap until the middle of the story. Showing something going on now is
more important than letting us know how things got the way they are.
- Vio's final fate came a little too abruptly for me; it might be better with a
little more buildup. (By contrast, some of the conversation with the villagers
seemed like it could be cut down. I don't know who Darakoth or Morran are, and
don't think I care.)
Gary