Hello, David! It's good to hear from you! ^_^
> RONIN SUMMER : DARK CRUSADE
>
> A Sailor Moon / Yoroiden Samurai Troopers cross-over
>
> by Morgan Hudson (dataraven_659@excite.com)
>
> Chapter One : Ill Winds
>
> A young man sat in meditation near a large crystal tube. The
> tube itself was not spectacular, except for its size. The contents of
> this tube, however, were another matter entirely.
Don't much like that.
Yeah, that last sentence does kind of smell like narration gone awry,
doesn't it? I'll try a rewrite before I put it on my webpage.
> occasionally bubbled and squelched to itself. Countless smaller tubes
> ran under the woman's skin at her ankles, wrists, waist, thighs, and
"past the woman's skin"
A good suggestion, but Latin D also covered this. I decided that saying the
tubes went "into" her skin would better describe the image I want.
> "Thank you, Sister Holts." The man gathered his cape around him
> and turned to face the small redhead. Her lower pair of eyes were as
> calculating as ever, but the pair above them seemed to gleam with an
> unusual delight. "Is there something you are not sharing with us,
> Sister?"
It's the attack of the space mutants!
^_^
> The large double doors swung inward with a flourish, and Rajura
> entered with an exaggerated bow. "My Empress!" He cried jubilantly.
> "You honour me with your presence. And I see you're wearing clothes, a
> double honour..."
This gives me totally the wrong mental image.
Sorry. Sometimes things like that slip in on semi-purpose. Just to see if
everybody's still awake. ^_^
Marvellous original villains. Really first rate.
Thanks for the comments and for the suggestions, David! I'm glad you like
Mother and her little darlings so far... some of the more interesting ones
Holts mentioned are still waiting in the wings.
Ja ne!
-Morgan Hudson
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