Overall I like this story. However I do have two comments.
1) Akane was handled better in my opinion than in the first
release and I can empathise with her far better than the demon
slaying obsessed bitch that she was coming off as in the original.
2) I'm sorry but I agree with David Johnston here.
Nabiki's motivation is just a little hard to swallow. Personally I
support the idea of Kasumi excepting the engagement rather than
Nabiki. This would lead to Nabiki getting to know Ranma better
to ensure that he's right for Kasumi and these talks result in the
two of them growing closer over time with the end result being
having the engagement switched over to Nabiki.
Well those are just my thoughts. Overall you're doing a good job
though and I commend you on a job well done.
Farewell for now,
Gettaone
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"If everyone in the audience who believes
in fairies would just clap their hands my
gun will be magically filled with bullets."
-What's Up, Tiger Lily?
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