Latin_D wrote:
he could dimly hear a radio humming platitudes to itself as two voices
Platitudes... Don't have a clue about what that is. Not that my vocabulary
is that big to begin with.
A platitude is an inoffensive and unoriginal thing to say.
"Hey, what can I say?" Yamanouchi shrugged and stared at the
roof of the vehicle as he rested his hands behind his head and fought
the urge to yawn. "I guess the kamis are causing trouble."
But isn't 'kami' a Japanese word? You once told me that the plural was the
same as the singular when Japanese words were involved, so it should be
'kami', right?
Right-o
As we're on the subject, why don't you simply use 'gods'? I've heard a
couple of people talk about gratuitous use of Japanese before...
Ah. Here we get into the distinction between gratuitous and
non-gratuitous use of Japanese. Since a "kami" isn't precisely the same
thing as a "god" using "kami" isn't gratuitous.
Which leads me to ask, how DO you kill one of these things? It's not like
they have a brain, or a heart, or lungs... You get the idea.
Sure they do. A little worse for the wear maybe, but the parts are
still there.
Nasuti turned to face Jun just as the jeep tipped over onto
its side, hurling her into the window. Crimson goo and black rags were
smeared all over the outside of the glass, and a more familiar pool of
crimson was forming under Nasuti's head. Jun began to move towards
There is such thing as a 'pool of crimson'?
Maybe 'crimson pool', or 'pool of crimson fluid', or something?
Perfectly acceptable figure of speech.
her, and heard the distinctive sound of twelve undead ninja hurling
In my dictionary (the one that had war-torn, so now I don't trust it that
much), 'distinctive' means 'easily identifiable'.
Is that particular sound distinctive, then? I'm not sure.
That depends on what you are comparing it to. If it's nine undead
ninja pounding on the underside of an '86 Hyundai, then it isn't
all that distinctive, but it is certainly distinctive compared to
the sound of 3 six year olds on a trampoline.
themselves against the undercarriage of a 1988 Suzuki Samurai.
The jeep began to roll over, and Jun began to scream.
Naaza hissed venomously and narrowed his hooded eyes, slitted
pupils seeming to disappear as the orbs glowed with a sickly purplish
light. "Oh," he breathed, his breath steaming from between his lips as
Um, 'breathed' and 'breath' in the same sentence is awkward. Don't know how
you could change it, though.
I don't know why the information that his breath is streaming from
between his lips is being given to us.
I notice he's not saying WHAT he can do, the useless weakling. ^_^
As we're on it, I just wanted to say something about the Jun-Hotaru happy
couple. K'thardin said in his comments that, if Jun didn't get some powers
so he could fight by Hotaru's side, their relationship was doomed to fail
(these weren's his exact words, but I really don't have time to reply
directly to his mail. Sorry). Well, I disagree. How is it that a powerful
man/weak woman couple works (there're plentiful examples of this out there),
but it doesn't the other way around?
General rules fail in individual cases. Does Jun have the good
judgement or cowardice to avoid jumping into situations that will get
him killed? Is Hotaru good enough to keep him from getting killed?