Hi!

Just a quick response, really, not full C&C.  I haven't really followed the previous chapters, so there's a lot I can't comment on - in fact, reading the earlier bits may have made what I'm going to say unnecessary.

But I read through this one, and one part that rang somewhat false to me was the confrontation between Shampoo and Ranma.  Not that there might be some attraction between them after so many years; sure that's fine.  But during the argument, it reads like you're playing fan-favorite with Shampoo.  She gets the good arguments, she gets the power of conviction, and Ranma loses his footing after a few stuttered words.  It just doesn't ring true.  Shampoo's arguments aren't even particularly strong, and the old 'we've been around for three thousand years' standpoint doesn't hold many logical points either.  Ranma may not be a debater, but he's not a moron, and his counters are pretty damn weak.  Maybe the plot needs Shampoo to hold the high ground after the discussion, but it would come off as a lot more believable if Ranma at least -tried- to offer up a convincing counter argument.

Other than that, it was an interesting read... I might have to go back and read the earlier bits.

-Mike Noakes
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