Subject: [FFML] [FIC][EVA] Evangelion: Betrayal
Date: Mon, 31 Jul 2000 11:09:25 EST
From: "Adrian Forest" <dalziel_86@hotmail.com>
To: ffml@fanfic.com
CC: efml@swampking.dts.emich.edu
Comments: I'll echo the other C&C on this one: it seemed a
little forced. I liked it, but it could do with some rewriting.
I realize its probably just a little aside, but the story could
definately be made much better with some more length and some
extension in the piping scenes.
Subject: [FFML] [FFML][Eva] Acceptance
Date: Sun, 30 Jul 2000 23:01:11 -0700
From: "Cory Holmes" <drgn.fire@home.com>
To: <ffml@fanfic.com>
Comments: WAFF. Interesting WAFF, but WAFF nonetheless. I'm not
a big fan of WAFF, but this was pretty well writen. I enjoyed
the interplay between Shinji and Asuka, I just don't think
Shinji would've tripped the Red Head of Doom. He certainly
doesn't have the balls for it.
Subject:
[FFML] [Fanfic][Tenchi]Sketches of Tenchi 6: Tearful
True Confessions
Date: Tue, 1 Aug 2000 20:10:18 -0400
From: "Miller, Bert" <bert.miller@unisys.com>
To: "'ffml@fanfic.com'" <ffml@fanfic.com>
<"Greetings, ephemeral universelings. I am Tokimi, your fellow
wife-to-be. I have come to get to know you better.">
This line is really funny to me for some reason. Good work Bert,
it kept me interested even though I got a little lost at the
beginning.
Subject: [FFML] [NGE] The Perfect Pilot
Date: Wed, 2 Aug 2000 21:44:43 -0400 (EDT)
From: Lara Bartram <lara@emunix.emich.edu>
To: ffml@fanfic.com (FFML)
Comments: Funny. Though ACC's have gotten much better since the
days of NXE. Not much else to say on that one.
Subject: [FFML] [Spamfic][Eva] Waves
Date: 3 Aug 00 20:48:15 EDT
From: goodmor^Ning <Vexron@netscape.net>
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Comments: This was, well, unexpected. Very, very funny. The
first part was suitably drawn out and angsty, and then the
punchline. A nice first post.
Subject: [FFML] [Eva][Fanfic][Draft] Tracks 3: Meaningless
Tracks
Date: Wed, 2 Aug 2000 11:56:12 -0400
From: "Platypus 3333" <platypus3333@yahoo.com>
To: "FFML" <FFML@fanfic.com>
<"Excellent," Kihl Lorenz said. "He's progressing nicely. Soon,
his guilt and disgust will come together to trigger... the Third
Impact!"
The rest of SEELE clapped appreciatively.>
Heh.
<"NOW." She waved it threateningly, then smacked him on the
cranium
for good measure.>
Heh heh.
<"You had a condom in your pocket for seven years?!"
"Yeah. Maybe the rubber went bad, or something-" 'I'm fucked.'>
Hahaha. This was very funny. That's all I'm saying.