Subject: [FFML] Re: [fanfic][Dirty Pair/Iria] Should Old Acquaintance Be Forgot chapter 5
From: "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
Date: 11/27/2000, 1:04 AM
To: "D.F. Roeder" <dfroeder@flash.net>
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Yay! Was hoping you'd comment on this:





Should Old Acquaintance Be Forgot

 >Chapter 5



WAI!



Yep. The wait is over.





 >green creature turned and strode away just as

 >purposefully as it had when it

 >approached Iria's prone form.

 >

 >Disbelief, not relief,



Me, too. O_O



Thought it might throw people for a curve momentarily.





 >

 >The particular outburst-cum-insult caused Kei to scowl at

 >her partner.

 >Giving Yuri a bland stare, the redhead said one word.

 >"Clydesdales."

 >

 >For a moment, it looked to Iria as though Yuri would fall

 >over dead, given

 >the ashen pallor her entire body took on in the span of a

 >heartbeat. In

 >total shock, the raven-haired troubleshooter babbled out,

 >"I thought your

 >memory of that whole day was erased!"



ARGH! More teasing of the reader. ^_-



Lots of past history referred to here. Expect to see none of it explained.

:)



 >

 >"What word?" Kei asked, now happy at having the upper hand.

 >

 >"Right," Yuri said, relaxing somewhat.



Hehehehehe



It's good to have true friends like these, ain't it?





 >

 >"I am not that way!" Kei shot back.

 >

 >"What about Senchiro Sykes?"

 >

 >"For your information, he was a hermaphrodite.

 >Hermaphrodites don't count.

 >And it wasn't like I knew he was one until we..."



O_O



LOL!



Well, it was an easy mistake for Kei to make. Trust me. :)









 >Bob tuned everything out after that. There were some

 >things no man, even one

 >reduced to being a computer intelligence, wanted to know.



HEEE!



Actually there are lots of things about women I sure don't want to know.

Just better off being kept in ignorance.











 >The commander considered that and nodded in apology.

 >"Sorry. Your sag is

 >barely noticeable."

 >

 >Iria had the Dirty Pair calmed down enough to start

 >talking coherently in

 >under five minutes.



Hehehehehe...



Iria knows how to play them like a flute.





 >you can manage, a

 >hundred, twenty gallon drums of paint thinner and

 >kerosene, a powerful laser

 >cutt inorch, and last but not least, a cinderblock."

 >

 >All Simms could manage was a twitch of the jaw.



Hehehehe



Heck of a shopping list to fill in on short notice.











 >Rene Foulcard



Nice name. ^_^



Random, actually. Is it actually from some other work and I'm not

remembering.?





 >said, "It figures the

 >one guy that thinks I got a nice rack I had to kill. I

 >just don't have any

 >luck."

 >

 >The redhead continued her search looking for more

 >compliments as well as

 >people to kill.



:) Ah, the trials and tribulations of trying to stay pretty. :)



A problem all women have. Us guys don't worry about it. We're either ugly or

we're not. :)





 >room one at a time in

 >order, always keeping one eye on the hall should she be

 >further down and try

 >making a break for it. Their caution paid off as, during

 >a search of the

 >third room, Yuri ran out of hers and made for the

 >adjoining corridor.

 >

 >Number 18



Number 2:  Number 6...



Number 6:  I am a man! Not a number!



Nah. He's a corpse in about twenty seconds.





 >The one creature in the galaxy that ranks only behind

 >Zeiram as the lowest

 >form of organism around, and he's a real close second.

 >This pustule that

 >stands before you is named Eugene Lance Killgore."

 >

 >Killgore appeared offended at the comparison, though the

 >smile never left

 >his features. "Hey there, Sunshine, is that any way to

 >properly introduce

 >your husband?"



ERK!!!



Thought that one might throw people. :)





Well, plot twist after plot twist in this one.



Yep. Trying to keep the reader interesting partially by keeping things off

balance. Actually moving along at a pretty fast clip. Not too fast, I hope.

Am trying to keep the action rolling and not bogging down in excessive

details. Not that there is anything wrong with that kind of style, just it

is not the one I am using.







Heh, nice chapter. Sorry I didn't have more commentary, but the

chapter was very clean.



Thanks. Just do your best. C+C on this one is enjoyed a little more than

most of what I get on other fics because of the sparseness of it for this

series.











 >Sorry it took so long to get this chapter out. Got

 >distracted with writing

 >low grade porn



O_o



Not going to disgrace the list by posting that one. Have to wander to the

ole' homepage to see what depths of cheezy depravity I have sunk to. 'The

Problems With Getting Off' (The title alone just makes you cringe, does it

not?)  ^_^





 >BTW: No one said 'Clydesdales' is a reference to horses.

 >Of course, it

 >doesn't say it's not either. ^_^



GAH!



Yes. Cringing in fear. Just the reaction I was looking for. :)



Thanks again.



D.B. Sommer











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