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Well....
Right. First off, you really need to put a disclaimer or notifier or
something to indicate where the various characters come from. We have to
piece together that the Hikaru you keep referring to is Hikaru Shidou of
Rayearth. Names are tossed around without any indicators. Not good.
It also seems very rushed. Frankly, it doesn't seem to really be going
anywhere. And why the new character? Is she strictly neccessary?
Finally, here's a reality check for the OAV. If *events* are dark, it
doesn't matter if Hikaru lacks a soul for them to be called dark. It
seems like we're supposed to sympathize with her when her behavior makes
that impossible. If it looks like a darkfic and smells like a darkfic,
it's a darkfic, regardless of the handwaving used to alter that.
All in all, I think the idea needs quite a bit of work. Sorry for being
harsh.
Whoever takes up the idea and writes this can alter it in any way that neds
it. If you want to write it then you can alter it. In fact this can be
written by different people and have differening versions. Whoever and
howmanyever want to write this can. Just make to credit me with the original
idea.
Fox The Wanderer Immortal Researcher of Universes and also a Ki Dragon
capable of being any shape , size , age , gender , or species. Known as God
of Martial Arts + Other Dimensional Travel. And as Kitsune Goddess of Chaos
+ Mischief.
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#SAS# , #WASHU# , and Always and Achika.
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CORAA , NKCOAAM , NKCOURAM.
And devoted follower of the Kawaii Goddess Hikaru Shidou.
High Priest of the Church Of Hikaru.
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