Subject: [FFML] Re: [fanfic][SM crossover] A General Time Paradox - Chapter2
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Date: 12/12/2000, 3:52 PM
To: Nidoking , ffml@fanfic.com

Heh... is it a coincidence that my last daily chapter is the one that's

turning into a serial discussion? I've been waiting for this for a long

time! ^_^



It's always nice... Feel free not to reply to this one, if you feel you're 

getting overworked, or kept away from writing your 'fics.





OK, after checking Toonami's database, I concur. The names will be

changed in the revision (see below).



Gotcha!







It's like saying "Lina cast the Dragon Slave" rather than describing the

entire action every time, I suppose. It's a brief term that some authors

use to describe a repeated action. (I'll probably describe the whole

spell at least once more... did anyone notice that the Dragon Slave has

stock footage when cast in the SM universe?)

..Dragon slave cast in the SM universe?

Typo, I presume. A mental one. But still funny.





Besides, they're supposed to go through some kind of traumatic

event before gaining that power. ^.^ Maybe the Moon kingdom

was founded by some sort of Saiyajin mutation...

(as they gain power by going near-death.)

Or maybe they are powered by strong emotions, like Ranma's

Moko Takabisha...





I don't know much about that... I didn't see season R, and in Super S,

Pegasus gave them their new forms and powers. But they didn't trust 

him

at first...



Well, go with what you feel is right.



I'm betting their bodies couldn't handle it, or some equivalent ^.^

(hands 1000yen to Nabiki)





You've lost your money.



Damn!





Actually, your Beryl is at least twice as capable as the one in

Anime...



Stupid bad guys get boring quickly. I'm exploring Beryl's craftier side.



Better this way, 'course.



This is Serena's class... So is it Haruna-sensei teaching?

(dunno what she's called in the dub)





I didn't see the full first season, and have no idea who any of the

teachers are. I've filled in a minor character of my own creation to

fill the unimportant role, which is about the only way I can think of to

deal with gaps of knowledge that I can't fill. If you know who the real

teacher is and are really bothered by the replacement (who is most

definitely a man, given the revision...), it's a substitute, OK? People

suddenly appearing, taking important roles in society for a short time,

and then disappearing has never made the Sailor Scouts or anyone else 

in

this universe suspicious. Pretend he's an advance scout for the aliens

from season R.



..-.-;

Okay...





Nah... it's one of those deus ex machina things. You know... the 

bad

guys are always led to suspect the wrong person by some strange

coincidental twist of words or events. I have Amelia suspecting

Stephanie because it fits the feel of the show.



Or 'Amelia' is just suspicious 'cause Stephanie has a bigger chest.

^.^

At which point this diverges from Slayers, btw?

AFAIK Lina was 15 or 16 when she met gourry, and eighteen during

Try. Actually, I think she's slighly taller in Try...





Who said anything about Try? Though it might be a bit of a spoiler, this

Lina comes from the end of Next. Lina had left Naga's company (or vice

versa) long before she met Gourry, if I haven't got my timelines mixed

up. Didn't Lina learn the Dragon Slave while traveling with Naga? 

I think she knew it *before* she met Naga. Giga Slave, too, afaik...

Not really important, though.



(I

haven't seen all of Try yet, if Naga comes back... but I'm quite sure

that the movies and Slayers Excellent [or is Great the name of the OAV

season with Naga?] take place before Slayers the original series).

Yep. A couple a years before the TV series, I'd presume. 





Actually, the first chapters of "HOI" are not that good.

She too, has improved with time.

Also, everyone has their preferences, and styles. I'm not

sure if Perry would even fit in the top ten, If I started listing

the authors I like. Allyn would probably be higher on the list

than her.





I actually (sorry) haven't read any of Allyn's work, or at least don't

recognize the name. My free time is pretty limited, so I just stick with

the stories that catch my interest. I could probably quantify which

stories those are, but I won't bore you with details. I've only been

reading from the FFML for a few months, so if the story was started

before this summer and never reposted from the beginning, I generally

don't get into it.



I'm not really sure how much of 'is work was posted here. I've read 

most of it at his website.





Oh, those attempts never work. Ryoko, for one, is just dying for some

action, and some of the later guest villains have rather malicious

intents for the Sailor Scouts. (Actually, one of those scenes fascinated

me so much that I've written almost eight pages of it already... and

it's only around half done.) As for Ranma and Lina's attitudes toward

having to kill the Sailor Scouts... wait and see. Their motivating

factors evolve as the story progresses.



Neat!



I think it's got potential, especially if you work

with Ranma. A LOT

of dynamic tension possible with him. Conflict between

Akane's life

and innocent lives. PLUS, all the people who will die

if the Senshi die.

(I _refuse_ to use the "SS" word. ^_^)



Lina, surprisingly, has probably the easiest time killing people.

After all,

she comes from somewhat paper-cut 'Sword and Sorcery' world.



But generally she's fighting bandits or evil mages or creatures. Not

innocent people. She's been known to defend innocent people.



True, but they're not exactly fighting 'innocent' people. I mean their 

opponents are fighters, they knew the risks, right? 

With her, there is quite a lot of liberty with how she'll deal with moral

conflicts. If Gourry's in a crystal(again) ^^; it has been shown she's 

willing to risk the destruction of universe, so what are few innocents...



The Space Pirate Ryoko wouldn't have much problems either, though

current Ryoko(after Tenchi) might.



Right... she certainly has enough history of violence in her past that

killing will come rather naturally to her, particularly with the added

incentive of protecting what Beryl has in her crystal. But even Ryoko

has a compassionate side.



True. Besides, she'd surely be prone to consider how Tenchi would feel

if she went out killing innocent people. 



Hmm... I think Ranma's the only one without previous experience on 

having someone close being trapped in a crystal... Strange.



Also, unless it's Washuu that's being used as a bait against Ryoko, 

the Number one genius scientist in the universe is bound to interfere

eventually. Except if this is pre-Kagato. Or some other than OAV-Ryoko.

Don't tell, OK ^.^ 

Speculation is half of the fun.



It's a good thing they were given direct order to avoid in-fighting.



Beryl has learned her lesson well. Like I said, I give bad guys more

intelligence than most people would, because I find them to be

relatively misunderstood, and therefore very interesting.



Better this way.

By the way, I noticed the mysterious fifth general has not made an 

appereance in quite a while... What are you plotting?

(again, don't tell)







Hmm... interesting thought. But, once again, as you will see in chapter

3, that would be just as bad as killing them. No, I'm afraid that

Ranma's attempt at such a solution would anger Beryl enough to prompt

the crystal's destruction.



Ooh...





You don't like Lina and Ryoko? They've got tension too. I'm just

leaving

that until later.



What do they look like in their disguises, BTW?

I didn't seem to catch how the magic changed their appereance.





Lina looks the same, but without her jewelry (the amulets, earrings, and

so on). It may seem ineffective, but the Sailor Scouts' tiaras and

miscellaneous jewelry disguises them adequately... (In chapter 3, Lina

is rather irritated that Stephanie doesn't recognize her as Amelia, and

brings this point up to herself.) Ryoko doesn't have a disguised form,

which is why she has to wait in the Negaverse while Ranko and Amelia 

go

to school.



Ah. But *surely* she's capable of changing her appereance... even

by herself, if neccessary. Or maybe it's not something she can do 

without the senshi picking it up, and QB knew this... Or maybe

it's because her physiology is so alien, that even if she changed 

her appereance, she could be simply detected for being such an

alien life-form, or...

Bah! 

I guess I'll wait and see.



LOVE the pun in the title, btw. I only wish I could do

things like that.



Really? It was a working title... but I guess this is a vote for

keeping

it.



It's pretty good. Maybe a bit too funny for the seriousness of this

fic,

but can't tell much about that yet.



I thought he meant the title of the fic, but he meant the chapter

title... The fic itself is serious, but Sailor Moon and the main

crossover series (Ranma, Tenchi, Slayers) are all humorous at times,

even in the midst of much seriousness. So I take the time for some

lightheartedness here and there, so that the whole thing doesn't lapse

into a depressing fic and drive the reader to the depths of depression

that are reserved personally for me.



Good, good.



Allyn mentioned a lack of plot developement, but IMO with relatively

short chapters I think you can afford two or three chapters for the

set-up - assuming you can churn them out at a relatively high speed.



I'm doing my best... Chapter 3 is proceeding quite well at the moment,

and as I mentioned, I am working on a future scene that I am sure 

people

won't want to wait for when I get there. The thing about this plot, and

most of my plots, is that they shift as the story progresses. At first,

it seems like a simple battle, but then the search for the Scouts' true

identities comes into play. Each character's motives will change (once

they have been revealed, of course...) as new information is given and

events shape the way they feel about their mission. And the semi-

random

elements of new enemies thrown into the mix will stir things up even

more. But before I lapse into gratuitous spoilers... I'd better sign

off. (Maybe I'll send a teaser of the fight scene I'm working on, if

anyone really wants to see it.)



Nah, save it for when you really need it.









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