cranky

1. colloq. eccentric, esp. obsessed with a particular theory

2. (esp. of a machine) working badly; shaky

3. (esp. N. Amer.) ill tempered or crotchety

take ye pick, 'kay? ^_-

I'd say #3 fits...;P



But, am I one to shy away from criticism?



Hells NO...^_~



Oh, by the way, thanks for reading...

The Fate of Hearts, Chapter 5

by Joshua 'Gargoyle' Trujillo <gargoyle@glasscity.net>

http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Towers/1509

So it is...Can also be found at
http://www.fortunecity.com/victorian/museum/1275



Normally, I don't reply onlist, but I wanted to clarify for those who may
begin their journey through my head with this one particular fic...

The Imperial Roman Eva alternative universe. This chapter is centred

on a battle in which Caelus/Shinji plays a decisive role in turning

around. Tightly written and the action flows well, especially since

the (approx) alternating of scenes from the aftermath of the battle

and of the battle itself.

Thanks...

Two reservations. The first is relatively trivial being some

skepticism of the battle tactics of the Roman legions - until the

Roman troops regroup on the hilltops, it doesn't seem to match the

standard idea of Roman order of battle which rely on solid lines

of legionaires who wait for the enemy to come to them rather than

the other way round. Using javelins to disrupt the enemy charge,

legionaires then buffet their opponents with their heavy shields

and then stick their shortswords into the guts of their enemies.

But that's just one conception. Even the pple at the medieval

warfare section of the department can't agree on *the* definitive

Roman ORBAT.

Yes, it is just one conception...However, it is a good one...



In this particular instance, I wanted something that wasn't in the
ordinary. I wanted something that was hurdy-gurdy (how the hells do you
SPELL that?)...

The second is that much of the battle is based on the premise of

Mistura/Misato losing her cool and falling into the barbarian trap.

That was particularly hard for me to swallow - she didn't rise to

become one of the most prominent generals in this elseworld by

being a hothead. The Misato in the standard NGE continuity also

never loses her cool during operations. The author does try hard

to justify this with a description of the barbarian provocation.

I still think that it would be more convincing if the mistake was

made by one of Misato's sub-commanders and Misato got injured in

the confusion while trying to reverse the situation.

'Twas a plot contrivance, get over it! ;P



Seriously though, I knew that not anything would drag her out of a
fortified position...So it had to be something pretty big...And seeing one
of her own getting hacked without being able to do something about it would
be pretty big...



Later parts will go back and show you that she realized it was a muck-up
and that those dead were on her hands...



And also that it was Caeles that stopped the tide of blood. And that's
something hard for her to live with...

Nonetheless, it *is* the author's story to do as he will. And I

did enjoy this installment. We never did find out what Flustra

found in Shinji's room.

^_^



*snicker-evillaugh-snicker*

All will be revealed in due course I

suppose. And the arrival of Proconsul Effero Sotter (Gendou) at

homebase... {ominous thunder}

Ahh, yes...The return of the prodigal *father*...



Well, again, thanks for the C&C, 'tis GREATLY appreciated...I just wanted
to clarify those points...



Joshua "Gargoyle" Trujillo

"Stone Cold Protector of the Righteous"



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