Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic][Ranma][Alt][Final Draft] One Man, Six Wives
From: "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
Date: 12/17/2000, 12:11 PM
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I think this is where the last time this was released ended:





"What so funny about marry six strong Amazon?!"



Soun froze completely.  "No..." he murmured under his breath.  "It can't

be..."  Fearfully, his head craned towards the source of the overly cute

voice.  Eyes lighted upon a mop of purple and reddish irises with a look

of

indignation.



"Shampoo wait for answer."



Methinks she might be waiting for a while.





The Tendo patriarch blinked dumbly for a few silent moments then scanned

the

entire room.  Five more girls were nearby, along with a very handsome boy

with a pigtail and a shrunken old woman holding a knotty, wooden staff.

He

screamed then.  "It wasn't a dream?!  How?!  Why?!  Saotome-kun!!  How

could

you do this to our solemn vow?!"



Genma: Because it keeps lie from being dull and uninteresting. A true

martial artist's life is full of fighting and being harrassed by lots of

women.





"Oh, Saotome-kun!!  What's happening?!  Why are all these women claiming

to

be your son's wives?!"



"Mass delusion," Genma claimed, and was promptly bopped in the head by

Cologne.





He and Ranma had arrived in China and set out to the Cursed Springs of

Jusenkyou.  Upon arrival, they were greeted by the Jusenkyou Gruide, a

bulky

man wearing an old green Chinese army uniform.  He spoke in broken

Japanese,

introducing them to the training grounds, then tried to warn them of the

dangers the pools held.  However, the pair paid him no heed, instead

taking

to the bamboo poles sticking out of each pool.  Then, they fought.



Hmm. This old scene. Make it as brief as possible. At least you saved it for

the middle of the story.





"Oh, Honored Sir!" the Guide started before pausing.  "Oh, no need worry.

Only fall into Nannichuan, Spring of Drowned Boy.  No harm done."



I doubt this, for some reason.





"<I... I...>"  She dropped the little package and lunged at the pigtailed

boy, succeeding in latching onto his leg with the strength of a starfish

opening the shell of a clam.  "<I love you!>"



Heh. I see it crosses all ages here. Hopefully Cologne won't be trying for

him next.





Ranma blinked in overwhelming shock as the kid



better with 'child' than 'kid'



unexpectedly tried to become

one with his calf and shin.



How sweet. My neighbor's dog tries to do the same thing with people's legs

as well. :)







"<Plum, what's wrong with you?  Just the other day, you were talking about

how boys were icky.>"



"<He's not a boy.  He's...>"  Plum made a fawning sigh.  "<He's a god in

human form...>"



Heh. Saffron might get jealous about that. :)







"Okay."  She turned to face the purple-tressed amazon.  "<He says he'll

take

on two Amazons, me and you.  You go first.>"



Hehehehe. Nince





"<Oh, yeah.  I hear he said that he's so good, he'll beat up five Amazons

all

by himself!  I just can't let that slide, so here I am to help fight for

our

honor!>"  The blonde struck a heroic pose as she made her proclamation.

The

effect, however was ruined by the broken ties on her cheogsam slipping

away,

revealing a fair amount of cleavage.



Wee! Fanservice





"<Frost!  What are you doing out here?>" Shampoo asked in puzzlement.  "<I

thought you hated hand-to-hand combat...>"



"<Now wait just a second here-!>"  Satin and Perfume started to cast their

votes of disproval, but one look from the albino's ice blue eyes brought

them

up short.  Mouthing the words, "Refuse, and I'll tell Shampoo what he

really

said," helped her out, too.



That settles that.





"<Oh, that poor boy.  Why throw your life away, when you could have me

instead!>"



"<Mother!>"



"<Hush dearie, and let me dream.>"



Heh.





* * * * *

[Author's note: This and the following segment is entirely spoken in the

village's dialect.]



You're better off just keeping the brackets. The above is very intrusive and

annoying.





"So, tell me, what brings you to the Joketsuzoku village, Guide?" Cologne

asked of the rotund man in the green chinese army uniform.  Both she and

he



Recommend just saying 'They'





The indigo-haired girl groggily opened her eyes tried her best to focus in

the direction of the voice.  "Who won?"



"The boy named Ranma did."



She smiled weakly.  "Good.



I was hoping 'accidentily' clubbing Perfume and Frost would tip the odds in

his favor.



  So, we'll get married, right?"



"Yes, you will.  All six of you girls will be married to Ranma."



"Great.  All six of us..." she mumbled, drifting off to sleep.



Cologne blinked, staring at Shampoo.  "My, she seems to be taking that

well.

I thought she wasn't into same sex relationships."



It's not the girls she's thinking about. :)





At that moment, the young woman's eyes flared wide open in abject horror.

"All six?!"



Oops.





Shampoo slowly nodded, a sense of dread settling in the pit of her

stomach.



"Apparently, someone pushed Frost to the ground in the middle of the

fight.

A bad choice, considering how much she dislikes others exerting their

physical superiority over her.  In anger, she used her magical abilities

to

create a tornado, which swallowed everyone involved in the fight,

including

herself.  After a moment, the spell abruptly ended, presumably when Frost

was

knocked unconscious.  As best as they can tell, he beat all of you at the

same time.  Since there is no subclause pertaining to instances such as

these," she continued on.  "It's been decided that he is to be considered

married to all of you,



"And we gets lots of Saotome children running around. Odds are we'll have to

banish at least half of them to maintain our sanity, but the half the remain

will ensure powerful bloodlines for generations." Cologne rubbed her hands

gleefully together.





"Ah, I see.  Well, I suppose we shall stay around until after the

reception."



"Well, Honored Sir, there little choice in matter of staying."



Tsk, tsk. Guide should have left him with his delusions.





* * * * *

Cologne remained in the healer's hut long after Shampoo had left to

prepare

for the polygamous wedding, still reading the huge, ancient tome opened up

before her.  Her finger slowly roved up and down the columns of Chinese

characters inscribed on the yellowed pages, aiding her in her quest for an

answer to a nagging question; just what spring did the Japanese boy (and

future son-in-law) Ranma fall into?  The guide had claimed the young

Saotome

boy fell into Nannichuan, but the elderly woman knew better than to take

his

word for law; he had been known to lose track of which spring was which in

the past, and those times had almost led up to disaster.



drop 'up'





Nabiki quickly cut it.  "Yeah, I was curious.  What brings you all here to

begin with, since Ranma seems to be having more fun with six girls over

there?"



"Um, we're looking for Mom," the pigtailed boy spoke up from his sitting

position.  "Oyaji had the idea that we should get her approval before I

became officially married."



ie: Stalling for time.



Nice work. Sorry I couldn't help further. Hope to see more.



D.B. Sommer









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