"Glazius Falconar" <GlaziusFalconar@peoplepc.com> wrote:
- An hour, huh? You may want to go back and tighten up the scenes
- with Sayuri and her brother - as it is, it feels like Akane's
- thoughts are more a sketch of what you want to happen in that
- scene than the scene itself.
Yeah... I felt that that bit was kind of rather sketchy, but wasn't sure
how to fix it. I'll go back and take another look at it.
- Still and all, it's an interesting idea - twisted without being
- exaggerated. What I'd expect from you.
Thanks for the insightful and thoughtful comments -- what I'd expect
from you. :) I always try to get my synopses in for weeks when I think
you'll be reviewing. Don't worry about getting these things done fast;
take the time that you need. As with fics, it's quality, not speed, that
matters.
Gary Kleppe
http://www.akane.org/gary/comics.html