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While the rest of this chapter is exceptional, the section where Ranma &
Tsunami talk feels like it could use some work. Shifting the responsibility
for the assimilation to Sasami was ok, but judging by her words you are
saying that Sasami forced Tsunami to do what she feared the most in the
first place?
Throughout the section you repeatedly mentioned how she was afraid of
merging, afraid of its consequences. Then BOOM she wanted it all along? It
just sounds wrong.
Tsunami has had years to think about what happened. I think her explaination
could have been better.