Excellent fic.

Thank You.

LOUSY fanfiction.

Hmmm... drat, I can't really disagree with you. Especially in light of
the criticism below.

RSS, while this was an excellent, if somewhat disturbing narative,

it is

rather poor fanfiction in my mind.  The characters names could be

replaced

with practically anything, and it would work perfectly.

Oh, given, there were token Sailor Moon references beyond the name,

but they

would easily have worked if his name was something like Dave and

hers

something like...I dunno, Tanya.

It WAS originally an introspective fic into Demando's mind, but then,
halfway through, it developed into a misdirection fic with the whole
Seiya-Yuuichiro thing. And then, on further revision, it became a
little darker and more twisted.

The only thing I can say in defense is that if you read it a second
time as a 'SURPRISE! Guess-who-the-characters-are' fic, the references
to Usagi, Rei, Yuuichiro, and Seiya become more obvious. Other than
though, as you and Miashara note, it could have definitely been
'original'.

Your writing is VERY good...this just wasn't much of a fanfic.

Thank you for the compliment, and for your honest opinion.

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