As the guy on the list who reads every original fic to come down
the line, this was too good an opportunity to pass up. Let's
dance.

The link was nice. 

No, really. Grammar and structure wise, I have nothing to say but
compliments. I didn't notice any errors, it was nicely readable,
and the few sentences that didn't make sense yielded to my eye
after a little investigation. The style was fairly unassuming,
which I liked, and let the story speak for itself. 

As for the story itself, I loved the jaded and callous
personnality of Nikki. She had a similar reaction to both Ryan's
tardiness and the discovery of the trap, something I liked in its
wrongness. If she started carrying out contracts early enough I
can well imagine her adapting to be who she is. I'm curious to
know how come she hasn't been caught yet, she certainly left
fingerprints enough and Ryan's unsilenced pistol should have
woken the neighborhood. Also, how does she keep such a secret
from everyone. Does she have no really close friends, the
impression that I got, all her friends are in on it, other than
Ryan, or is she simply that devious? 

This has been the long way of saying: "I like. More please."

Miashara
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