A couple of comments for this prologue.

First, a Ranma/SM cross-over, and no Ranma/Usagi-Makoto-Minako-etc.  This 
might not be the first, but...  I like it.

Second, I would be interested in seeing where this story takes place in the 
two sources.  A small degree of age difference (but I guess with Usagi/Mamoru 
that wouldn't make a difference).  And then there is Akari...

I really didn't see anything that stood out in the way of typos and 
misspellings.  And the attack names that Mercury and Mars used could have 
been upgrades on their basic attacks of Shabon Spray and Fire Soul (yes, I 
have not seen all of Sailor Moon).

I am not sure Rei would fall for a guy that fast.  Minako maybe...


I would like to see more of this fanfic.  If this is your first REAL (your 
emphasis) fanfic, then should be more.

James Holzhauer (aka Tobimaro [Ton-chan])


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