Saotome Genma wrote:

[Ranma][Fic](1/2) Consultations

This has the same setting as "The way out" mini-fic, "Autumn Leaves",
"Keeping Up Appearances" and "Such things as dreams are made of"

  Missnig end punctuation.

  Remember, all of my comments can be discarded, should you find them disagreeable. :)

What has gone before:
Ranma's better nature and a Chinese-Amazon artifact have combined to
return Akane's mother to life - in Ranma's body.  To say Akane has not
taken this well is rather like saying Ryoga doesn't have a very good sense
of direction ...

  I think she partially snapped in the last part.

Consultations: Part 1.

 "I don't know why we have to go now." Akane complained.

  now." Akane -- now," Akane

"You trust Dr. Tofu don't you?  I'll come with you if you want." Kasumi
offered.

  want." Kasumi -- want," Kasumi

"No! No thank you." Akane replied, making Kimiko wonder just why she was
so forceful about it.

  you." Akane -- you," Akane

"I think I'll tag along," Nabiki said with some of her usual acerbity,
"someone has got to keep an eye on the young loverbirds."

  acerbity, "someone -- acerbity. "Somone    (Suggestion)

"You're so cute when you're embarrassed." Akane said, grabbing Kimiko's
arm as they set off to the clinic.

  embarrassed." Akane -- embarassed," Akane

The journey was short, and quiet, giving Kimiko a chance to think about
Akane's condition.  At least she seemed content to just hold hands - She
hadn't dared say anything to Akane last night after her mis-directed
farewell.  She had just hoped that her daughter was just confused by
sleepiness and wouldn't remember the following day.  Breakfast had been
... painful was the only word.

  short, and -- short and (Or was that intentional?)

  Repetition of just.

"Ranma, Akane and Nabiki! What brings you here?" Dr. Tofu asked, they
hadn't moved as if they were injured.  Akane was cheerful - more so than
usual, Ranma looked very concerned about something and both Nabiki and
Ranma had flinched when he called his name ...

  asked, they -- asked. They (Suggestion)

  Wasn't the previous paragraph from Kimiko's PoV?

"I see." Tofu stated, although if it had been any other family ...
"How are you coping with Ranma's loss? he asked Akane.

  see." Tofu -- see," Tofu

Tofu looked from one patient to the other.  "If I could see Mrs Tendo
first."

  Mrs -- Missus or Mrs.

"Oh, I'm not 'Mrs' yet, doctor." Akane said with a blushing smile.

  Ditto.

"He means me." Kimiko said, much to Akane's confusion - although she
didn't object when Kimiko left her.

  me." Kimiko -- me," Kimiko

"I'd like to test something, if you would." Tofu said, continuing on
Kimiko's assent, "Could you take a strike at my hand?" he asked.

  would." Tofu -- would," Tofu

  assent, "Could -- assent. "Could

Tofu winced slightly as he absorbed the impact, but he had learnt what
he wanted to know.  "You've had some martial arts training?" he asked,
rhetorically. "Ranma was a great martial artist - as he would have been
first to admit.  I expect this body is stronger, and faster than you
realise.  You should begin training again as soon as possible so that you
don't hurt anyone accidentally."

  learnt -- learned (?)

  realise -- realize

  It's Tofu's PoV again here, but was Akane's a bit earlier.

Tofu smiled, a little, and said "You'd think so, wouldn't you?  You will
also need to improve your skills I'm afraid Ranma had enemies, and
friends, who might not wait for your life story before attacking."

  skills I'm -- skills. I'm (Or some such. It looks like some punctuation is missing there.)

Nabiki nearly fell over when the door opened suddenly.  She blithely
ignored the looks of disapproval she received - she had a right to know!
This was her mother, whatever she looked like, and she wasn't going to let
her out of sight again.

  And now it's Nabiki's PoV?

"Sit down, please, Akane." Dr. Tofu said. "How are you feeling?" He
asked as he examined her head for signs of injury.

  Akane." Dr. -- Akane," Dr.

  But when did Akane come back? How did this door just open, and drop Nabiki into the room? I might have missed something, but I'm a tad confused...

"Wonderful! I'm getting married, you know.  I suppose it will take a
while to get things properly organised - I just can't wait!" Akane said.

  organised -- organized

"Ah-hah." Tofu said noncommittally, as he continued his examination.
"When did you decide to do that?"

  hah." Tofu -- hah," Tofu

"I finally told him I loved him last night - we stayed up all night
talking." Akane said cheerfully.

  talking." Akane -- talking," Akane

"No ... well just that he's been so well behaved - I suppose all his
insults were just frustration at not having admitted his feelings for
me. 'I Love You' isn't it amazing how much difference those three small
words can make?" Akane said, and smiled at Tofu.

  You' isn't -- You'. Isn't (or) You.' Isn't  (I'm told the latter is correct, though I fail to conform, myself.) Otherwise, I'd think Akane was professing her love to Tofu.

"Well you seem to be in good health - but I'd like to see you both again
soon.  If you stay here a moment I just want a quick word with Nabiki and
..." he trailed off - not wanting to lie with 'Ranma' or confuse her with
'Kimiko'.

  The last 'her' mentioned was either Nabiki, or Kimiko. Should maybe replace with 'Akane'?

Nabiki looked blank for a while then came up with a rather unlikely
match for that description. "Cologne?  You might have something there - if
she can work with Dr. Tofu at another appointment" and if she was still
in Japan, she thought to herself.

  appointment" and -- appointment." And (I think)

  Interesting story, if some of the episodes feel very rushed. I think I kinda like it. :p