On Sat, Jan 12, 2002 at 04:44:25PM -0800, Thryth wrote:
"Quiet you," Ryoko said with obvious good
humor. "Remember, Minagi, we have to be up early
tomorrow." She was never really certain why she had
suggested naming the girl that, it just seemed right.
Perhaps, she wanted to atone for her part in the
bounty hunter's fall from grace, she did not know for
certain.
"Quiet you" -> "Quiet, you" is more natural.
And it makes sense that she'd want to take care of ghosts.
"Yeah!" the girl declared excitedly. "We're
going on a trip!!"
"Yes," Ryoko said. "We're going on a trip to
see Akane graduate the academy." Her own daughter, a
cop, imagine that.
An Earth cop or a Galaxy cop?
"And we're all going right?" Minagi asked.
"Right," a voice said from the door. "Your
grandparents, your Aunt Ranko and Uncle Kaneda, all
your Aunties, even Auntie Ayeka is meeting us there.
But Mommy's right. You need to get some sleep so you
can wake up early tomorrow."
Auntie Ranko? Uncle Kaneda? I can understand "Auntie Ranko", but who's
Kaneda?
And do they really need to hide Ranma's curse? After all, Ryouko can
fly, teleport, and throw energy balls, and their family pet can turn
into a little girl or a spaceship. I really doubt that their kids are
unaware that Ayeka is from off-Earth. All told, it seems like such a
silly little thing to hide. (Do they never go to the beach?)
"Right," Ryoko said, amused. "There is always
hope." She turned toward him and they kissed quietly
in the doorframe. Then Ryoko smirked as they
reluctantly broke off. "Such as I hope we can afford
another mouth to feed."
I'm not a master of interspecies biology, but wouldn't Ryouko's mixed
origins cause problems, either right there or somewhere down the line?
Hurrah! Another good fic joins the many green dots on Rakhal's index!