This also got rejected for content. Read it if you want to.

"Well, this is what you wanted, Mitsuki. So tell me, why is it you feel like
you've stabbed your best friend in the world in her back?"

Usagi: It's because you stabbed your best friend in the back! (blows her nose on a tissue then cries into Minako's shoulder)

Minako: (rolls her eyes)

Ami: Hmmm... shouldn't that be 'on' her back?

Conflicting thoughts and desires surrounded Kazuki. How could one man
produce such deep and opposing reactions within her without even trying? 

Ukyo: I can think of a few reasons.

Shampoo: It probably because he an animal in bed.

Ruri: Baka.

Most men hadn't been able to make her feel anything. 

Except for contempt maybe, or disgust.

It was true. The lies were falling like dominos. She knew she tended to act
shrewish, petty, and egocentric. But she wasn't really like that, or at
least not to the degree that she openly demonstrated. 

Kodachi: And what's wrong with acting pretty and egocentric?

Naga: Nothing at all! Oho ho ho ho ho!

It was the sort of pathetic joke children ignorant to the way the world
liked created. 

'Ignorant to the way the world liked' sounds wrong.

the area. Mitsuki hissed in pain from the strike.

Ranma: (wince)

to rape us. Mitsuki couldn't deal with it, so she let me take over.
Ordinarily I only get to run free when she needs me to act as spokesperson
for the Rara Army or out in the field. But this was one time she needed me
outside of uniform."

I'm having sudden flashes of spiderman fighting Typhoid Mary, or the X-Men fighting Legion. 

think I'd enjoy being raped and I'd want more of it, or I'd just go out of
my mind? Well, Mitsuki? Tell me!"

Ouch. That prolly hurt more than the physical beating.

slender heels that increased Miss Ra's height several centimeters, adding to
her already domineering stance.

Bad mental image!

"Wellll..."

Haruka: (settles down) Get some popcorn, will you? And stop crying!

Usagi: (sniffles) But it's so sweet!

Once more Mitsuki felt like a mouse under a cat's careful scrutiny. Only
this time she was far more excited than the last.

Haruka: Say, Usagi, what would you say to a little-

Usagi: NO!

Haruka: Really? How about a little-

Usagi: NO!

Haruka: Fine, I can take a hint. (grumbles)

Feeling a wave of trust wash over her, Mitsuki went against her
self-preservation instincts and remained motionless.

Asuka: Stab her! (notices everyone looking at her) What?

Miss Ra grabbed the collar of Mitsuki shirt and began cutting through 

Mitsuki's shirt

garments aside, revealing Mitsuki's flesh to the air.

Air: (drools)

Mitsuki was too stunned to say anything as she felt the air upon her naked
flesh. 

Air: (grins)

"You can't do that!"

Nabiki: (laughs)

forced Mitsuki's head away, leaving the bound girl was as breathless as she
was helpless.

Hey, that rhymed! You should be a rapper, like Eminem.

"Don't go!" Mitsuki shouted as Miss Ra opened the door.

Haruka: Knew it, she's one of us.

couldn't shower the attention upon them that Miss Ra was skillfully doing,
nor the affection her playfulness and teasing entailed.

Naga: Actually, if they're big eno- OW!

Lina: Stop rubbing it in! (grumbles)

hesitation about having sex with a woman, they were forever gone with how
enjoyable the sensations were.

Michiru: (sighs)

Miss Rah simply gripped the cotton panties firmly and ripped them off. She
tossed the tattered remains on the floor.

Nabiki: They're losing a fortune in clothing this way.

arousal leveling off. Frustrated, she said, "More to the left."

Rara: No, the _other_ left!

much more whole than before. It feels good. Very, very good."

Legion: I felt that way too... but then I went to the past and killed my father. Bummer.

in there. She thought she rather like the mix of the two. It seemed to be in
just the right amounts, at least in her opinion.

If you've ever read the dojin 'Hot Tails Extreme' this should be familiar.

She tried saying no, but couldn't force the words out. With a resolve that
was more reminiscent of Miss Ra than Mitsuki Rara, she softly said, "Do you
think he's placed us in each other's arms because he wants Yayoi and doesn't
want to us to be hurt and alone?"

Ranma: (slaps his head in annoyance)

Tenchi: (groans)

Akito: (laughs)

Ruri: Baka.

It did feel like a brave new world after all.

World: I don't take $hit from nobody!

Got a bit heavier than I originally envisioned, especially with Mitsuki's
reflections on her behavior, but I prefer it to the lighter version I had in
mind. it was rather fun taking a look inside her head to get a better grasp
for her motivations. It meant cutting back on the lemon bits more, but it
was always going to be more of a story with lemon in it than a lemon with a
little story in it. Hope you enjoyed.

I did, actually. Nice work.

Jose Argao

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