--On 4/22/02 3:43 PM -0500 Apollo Racer wrote:
I can't recall having posted a C&C on here before. Whether because I
actually didn't or my SCFB (Swiss Cheese For Brains) deprived me of the
memory is anyone's guess. ^_^
In either case, thank for you taking the time now. :-)
Shibuya-Ku, Tokyo at eleven o'clock the next day. And it had been signed
Ranma Saotome.
This sounds a little awkward. Perhaps you could use 'And it had been
signed, "Ranma Saotome."' Or maybe signed BY Ranma Saotome. *shrugs*
Hmm. That's a good point; I just wrote it as I would have said it. I'm
not sure what would be most correct. I'll look into it.
date, and therefore her daughter and descents as well,
I think the word you're looking for is descendants.
D'oh! You are, of course, correct.
Hehehe... I can just see her moaning that into the porcelain throne in
between retches. ^_^
<smirk> Only because she lacks the strength to scream.
Is Ho Tu-aks a real name, or are you saying it's terrible because it just
doesn't roll off the tongue?
Ho Tu-aks is made up. Xuan Pu (if none of the others) is a real Chinese
name. Ho Tu-aks (for Hotwax) was irresistible, but not realistic, I
thought. I don't think there even is an 'aks' sound in Chinese. :-)
I have to applaud you on a wonderful story. I don't think I've seen this
type of solution used before. Of course, it may have, and my
aforementioned SCFB is hiding it from me. I like how it seems Shampoo
seemed to look forward to "taming the horse," so to speak ;), as well as
Nabiki's obvious satisfaction in depriving her of that prize. And of
course, any story that was not only well-written, but also inspired by
KaraOhki, is a big bonus, too. Kudos. ^_^
Apollo Racer
Thank you very much for your C&C and for your flattering words. :-)
Jim