Just a few little comments contained within.  As much as I loved escaflowne,
I was never happy with how it ended it is nice to see a continuation fic.
Now off to chapter 1 ^_^

Take care
Jen
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Subject: [FFML] [repost][fic][esca] Mystic Eyes Prologue> world.

Yukari sat on track, watching Hitomi prepare for the
last track meet of her high school career.   Within a
month she would be graduating then entering Keio on a
full track scholarship.

month, she

Hitomi's shoulder-length brown hair was pulled back
strictly from her face, and she was stretching

strictly doesn't sound right for hair maybe sternly, or harshly.

slide the ribbon around her neck, she wondered what
the point was.   Why did she have to run with a crowd?
 She ran for only one person, and he wasn't here.   He
had never been here-  perhaps she had dreamed him.
She often wondered if she had.

here...,  I think, however, I'm still unsure of the elipse usage.

An hour later it was over, and Yukari was hanging on
her arm,  pulling her along, she chattered eagerly
about her latest accomplishment.  Hitomi nodded and
followed not really paying attention.   Poor Yukari;
Hitomi never really paid attention anymore.

as she chattered

"...Tarot?"

"What?" Hitomi said, the word jerking her out of her
reverie.

"Have you read the tarot to see your future lately?"
she asked.

Hitomi's eyes darkened.   "Yukari, you know I don't
read the tarot anymore."

Yukari's eyes flared angrily.   "You don't do
anything anymore!   What the hell happened to you,
Hitomi?   Wasn't I your best friend?   You're not at
all like the Hitomi I grew up with!"

eyes twice

Hitomi blinked, trying to assimilate Yukari's sudden
outburst.   "Yukari..." she said hesitantly, trying to
find the words for her pain.

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