hi there,

I've enjoyed this fic so far,

      thanks, good to hear! :)

but...

      uh oh! ^_^;;

 The execution just didn't do much for me
and to tell the truth I was more satisfied with
Akane and Ranma's
breakup before it was explained thoroughly.

     Probably you're right about the execution. Once
I'd had time to think on it a little, I realized i
could have explained things a little more clearly.
     I AM sorry you think this chapter was unnecessary
but a lot of people wanted to know, and I'd actually,
believe it or not, planned it this way from the very
beginning.
      

One of other major problems with this is
feasibility.

    I'd guess it's the main one. o_O

 To tell the truth I don't think that Kuno would
react like that(or even get it
with an explicit explanation, which a drugged Nabiki
might not be able to give in the first place).

    Regarding Kuno- I think people underestimate him
    Re: nabiki, another thing I could have made
clearer is how sometimes when you're drunk, you do
repeat things excessivly and ultra-slowly....

If Ranma can't beat Kuno,
this makes no sense because Kuno would just attack
him...

    Well, Kuno developed a perverse horror of even
facing male-Ranma, now hating him as intensely as he'd
loved PTG.

if he can, it
still makes no sense, because Nabiki and Akane just
need to delay until
he gets there--and then _he_ beats the photo's out
of Kuno.

    Kuno's kinda scary with the amount of punishment
he can take and still not give up/in.

Anyway, though I've liked the story to this point, I
think you would
be better off either leaving the breakup unexplained

    Here, i'm afraid some people disagree...:)

or at the least altering it to eliminate some of the
weaknesses. This felt a lot like
a plot device, 

    Very valid point. Like i said, it's how I saw the
story from the beginning, but I've realized that
writing a fanfic does not automatically mean you
convey a 100% accurate image of what's in your head to
your readers...so, this looks like it needs a little
revision. :)

Hope this helps, even if it did come off a bit
negative.  I'm looking
forward to more chapters of the story in general.

    It really did. Thanks for taking the time to
comment. And I'm glad you're still looking forward to
chapters of this story!! o_O;;
    I hope the revised version will be more to the
satisfaction of readers.

Roja.

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