--- "Miller, Bert" <Bert.Miller@unisys.com> wrote:

Just a couple comments on the comments, which were
very insightful overall.

      It was strange, now that Megumi thought

about it, but she almost never saw Belldandy eat 
anything.  In fact, as far as Megumi could recall, 
Belldandy never packed a lunch for herself.

Don't believe this is canonical, either, and it
might get in your way.  

Actually, this is canonical. Other than Skuld eating
ice cream and specific social events (Keiichi taking
Belldandy out to dinner) none of the goddesses ever
eat a thing. Belldandy never brings herself anything
when she brings Keiichi his lunch and he never offers
her anything. They do drink tea, and of course Urd
drinks sake as well. Still, the manga never
specifically says "goddesses don't need to eat". 

Even long-time AMG fans tend to assume they eat,
though. I used to assume the same thing.

      "Me?  I'm the captain of the softball team. 

"I'm also sort of an unofficial member of the motor 
club."

Why "unofficial"?  Not sure there is any such period
in AMG manga continuity, where she's certainly a 
member. Unless this is a plot point for you, suggest

you just take the point out. It's clear enough in 
the movie that she's a full member.

I don't believe she's a member at all in the manga.
She certainly is never in any of the scenes where we
see Auto Club members. Probably could go either way in
the story.

"They're the only responsible members of the club.

Suggest "They're the most senior members of the club
with any
sense of responsibility."

Not sure why you'd be suggesting that Sora Hasegawa
isn't responsible.

That's for sure. 

Ranma noticed from up close the facial markings

she wore were not tattoos, at least not like any he 
had ever seen.  Rather, it looked as if the skin 
itself was actually colored differently.  It was far

too real to be body paint, though.

Not sure if your intent here is that Ranma notices
the markings, while nobody else does, but that Ranma
doesn't know what they mean?  If everybody is 
supposed to be able to see them, and they look like 
this to everybody, that might be a problem of
sorts; manga continuity makes it clear that
everybody at Nekomi knows that Belldandy is a 
foreigner, but nobody every mentions the markings.  

Someone did ask in the early manga if Belldandy were
from India, but as you say they got used to them
really quickly and nobody pays them any attention any
more, even when new goddesses show up. They do still
get comments like "those people are weird" and wary
looks when they go out of town, though. ^_^

You're certainly at liberty, as an author, to ignore
the manga, but I think you'll be cutting yourself 
off from a good fraction of your potential 
readership by making a deliberate decision to
do so.  Most C&C I've looked at on AMG/OMG fanfic on
this list suggests that people who bother to C&C 
such fanfic possess, and will assume on the author's

part, a great deal of such familiarity.

Eh? Who would that be?

Brian W.

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