--- Thermopyle <Thermopyle@tds.net> wrote:

Um, sold?  Glancing nervously towards the lines of
people that were all
looking at her now, who she now identified as
customers waiting to pay
for their groceries, she remembered that odd mortal
tradition.  She
wasn't sure what happened when you tried to leave
with stuff without
giving them money in return, but she doubted it was
good.

Urd knows about money. Just 8 chapters previous to
where this starts, she asked Keiichi for money to buy
clothes because her license was suspended and she
couldn't conjure them. Of course, it would be just
like Urd to forget to ask Keiichi or else not bring
enough and try to sneak out with the bottles anyway.

Police?  Remembering his earlier comment, she
decided to keep the
question to herself, not wanting to reveal further
ignorance.

In that same chapter, Urd on a motorcycle was chased
for several minutes by several squad cars. She's very
aware who the Police are, though Ranma's comment would
still catch her by surprise. I doubt she would have
thought about being chased by them, again.

"Okay, Belldandy," Skuld said dubiously, "but I'm
still going to build
something just to be on the safe side.  

Could you have somebody else call Belldandy by name?
Skuld always says "big sister".

Belldandy stared down at her food for a minute, then
brought her eyes
back up to look at Urd.  "Does he know you're a
goddess?  If he can see
auras, he should be able to figure it out.  If he
was here, he could
probably sense the same thing about Skuld and I."

Skuld and I => Skuld and me.

I enjoyed this a lot. Interesting twist on the Shouhei
theme.

Brian W.

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