Aaron Bergman wrote:

Yes, this is a lemon. We ALL know what that means... :p

Solid storytelling, stirring characterizations, and a deep moving plot?

For continuity purposes, this takes place somewhere around
the middle of the first arc; between episodes 5 and 10...

Now that leaves quite a bit open.

SHOJO KAKUMEI UTENA
Taking the Revolution
by Eyewrin "the EVIL Clone" Bergman

Bah. I disavow nothing I've written by blaming an evil twin. I just don't
post my truly evil work. The last one was 250K too. :(

There's something different about her today.

Ignoring Rai for a second (he was just a bit too
eager this morning when I asked if he wanted to 'meet' me,
and it'd do him good to simmer just a bit longer)

Ah, Touga on one of his yaoi binges I see. :)

"Curiouser and curiouser..." I mumbled.

Horribly, the Alice in Wonderland motif would mix well with Utena's
surrealness.

 Ordinarily,

I could care less about Miki's pink-haired friend; her life
and mine almost never crossed paths, but the expression on
her face...

It was a look of almost blank terror, as though
something was building in her mind;

Akio: That would be me.

I shrugged and smiled. "What, we'll be late to our
first class?" I let the smile drop and said, "Do you think
that I'm not _worth_ being late once in a while for?"

Rai: well, I can always hit on one of Nanami's little henchmen...

He waved one hand desperately, and I knew that he was
mine.

Rai: Right up until the moment you put out and my use for you is at an end.

****

I am not, as some might term me, a slut.

I accept contributions for sex. That makes me a whore.

Rather, I am a connoisseur. I sample men just as a
wine-taster would try grapes from vinyards scattered across
the world. I've tried men from all walks of life; from fat
and slender to young and old to tall and short from rich and
poor and smart to stupid, I've taken a taste of them all,
and liked it almost every time.

Touga: Amen.

But for now, I simply make good use of my emergency
kit (a quick douche, a handy napkin, a fresh pair of panties,
and a puff of perfume) and wave goodbye to Rai, in more ways
than one. He's become a bit... boring.

Rai: And you've always been boring, but I'm just using you to get to Miki
anyway.

 Time to find a new

man, one that KNOWS who's in charge of this relationship...

A quick glance at my watch told me that if I hurried,
I wouldn't be late to my first class (which was yet ANOTHER
thing that was wrong with Rai, if you take my meaning),

Rai: Ha! Like I'm concerned about you. Hon, once I've gotten off, that's
mission accomplished, as far as I'm concerned.

Touga: Amen.

so I

start hurrying.

About three minutes of quick walking later, I found
myself passing the rose garden that odd girl Anthy

girl, Anthy

Himemiya

probably a comma there too, but I'm not as sure.

spends all her time in. My feet slowed down as I heard
Utena Tenjou's voice.

"Himemiya, I didn't want THIS!!!

I think one exclamation would do.

Himemiya's voice, the legendarily nice, mild girl who
always had a kind word to you, even if you'd just slapped
her,

Saionji: Amen.

assumption was proven correct.

Miki's eyes shifted rather uneasily, and I could tell
that he was about to lie to me. He never learned how, the
poor dear; I almost pity his first girlfriend... a woman
doesn't mind being lied to half so much as being lied to
_badly_...

That's not what the women I've known told me, even when I lie good and they
only find out about it through a twist of fate.

I never called him on it, though, and went to bed
that night without my curiousity satisfied. Just _what_ was
going on with Utena? And why would Miki be involved?

And then it occurred to me: a threesome. That would make Miki even a bigger
slut than I. It made me jealous, let me tell you.

Although I may not care to use it much (aside from in
one particular pursuit, of course) I'm almost as intelligent

That reads awkward. I'd rewored it.

as my brother, who is a genius. My mind suddenly latched on
to the only connection between them (aside from Himemiya, of
course): The

don't think 'The' needs to be capitalized there.

 rings that they both wear.

Miki started wearing his after getting it

drop 'it'

a strange

letter that he stared at for hours before putting it on.

I may not follow Utena around like SOME girls I
could name,

Wakaba: Like I give a rats ass what you think.

Miki didn't wake up at my sudden outburst, for which
I was grateful. I put my head over the edge of my bed (I've
insisted on the top bunk for years) and watched him sleep for
a minute or so.

I thought their beds were seperate, though they did sleep in the same room.

Rai had been just as upset as I'd predicted to
myself,

Well, he actually had fallen asleep mid-way through my dumping of him, but I
knew he was just seeting with disappointment in his drreams.

As I walked through the empty halls of the Ohtori
high school, I marveled at how... different... it was without
people in it. Sure, there was the dim, muted hum of lectures
from behind classroom doors, but it was so peaceful and
serene; as if it all belonged to me, and nothing else would
EVER disturb this one moment but the clack of my shoes on
the tile floor...

And 'The Sunlit Garden' playing in the distance.

The illusion was shattered as a student turned a
corner, and I laughed out loud as I adjusted my walk to a
much quieter one. He nodded to me, grinned, and walked past.
He looked familiar... maybe I'd met him at that party six
months back? It had been a pretty wild night...

Touga: Amen.

Saionji: Don't remind me!

Utena Tenjou, with her trademark red shorts
(honestly, hasn't anyone TOLD her what they say about girls
with red shorts?)

They look short and red?

But... there was a rather nice penis hanging down in
the toilet. Attached to HER. My gasp of shock escaped before
I could control myself.

Oops.

It twitched even as I looked at it, and I knew, right
then and there, that I _wanted_ it, with a sudden intensity
that shocked me. A mocking voice began to sing in the back of
my head. _Kozue-chan's gonna get la-aid. Kozue-chan's gonna
get la-aid..._

Heh. Nice touch.

This is the only reason that I've been able to think
of for every single bathroom at Ohtori Academy having inside
locks on the door.

Akio: No, that would be my doing, actually.

I made comforting sounds as I rocked her back and
forth gently, wiping the tears from her face with gentle
hands and the occasional soft kiss (hey, kissing isn't always
sexual!) "Tenjou-sempai, would you like to tell me about it?"

Utena: Anthy fed me this magic curry, you see, and then this popped out.

"I'm a woman! That's all I've ever wanted to be! I've
never looked at girls that way, and I've never wanted to!"

Utena: In the anime, in the manga, however, there are some questions to be
answered.

I brought my hand away, sliding one finger over the
head, and it came away with a line of precum that glistened
in the sunlight through the window. Not wanting to let it go
to waste, I brought that finger up to my mouth and sucked it.
Utena watched me with a half-terrified, half-thrilled look
that I'm all too familiar with. Somehow, seeing it on the
face of a woman instead of a man made it even cuter.

So now she's addicted to shemales. Oh, is there no depths of depravity she
won't sink to? ^_^

I put one finger against her lips; the same finger
that was still coated in my saliva. "No 'buts,' Utena-chan.
Buts are baggage,

Utena: Actually, I was going to say, let me do you in the butt.

Kozue: Oh, well that's different.

"Y-yes! YES!"

Ten seconds later, she was cumming in my mouth.

One of my friends often says that she can't stand the
taste of it, and she looks at me quite funny whenever I talk
about how much I love it.

Actually in some frank discussions with women I've had you'd be surprised at
the opinions some have on that. Stereotypes were thrown ny the wayside.

Just as Utena was starting to soften, the sight got
to her at a visceral level, and the limp began to straighten.

Utena's a studly gal. :)

I keep myself shaved clean for several very good
reasons, not the least of which is

lice.

With that said, I set to using every trick I've
learned in a year and a half of sex. Some sluts don't know
how to keep themselves tight, or else they're too lazy to do
it, which I can't understand; all it takes is a few simple
exercises to keep almost as tight as the first time. The men
thank you,

if they don't just roll over and go to sleep.

When HAD been the last time I'd had three orgasms in
one day? Even Touga had only given me two... and the second
hadn't been so grand...

Touga: I was bored. Forgive me.

She had a different technique than me. While I liked
to almost savagely attack myself, Utena rubbed me gently,
slowly, almost teasingly. She shifted herself upwards, not
stopping that _wondrous_ friction between us, and put her own
mouth to work on my breasts as her free hand moved to my
ass, rubbing gently.

It was the third time in my life that I've screamed
during an orgasm.

And one of those times was when I was accidentily hit with a staple gun in a
sensative area. And don't ask what he was doing with a staple gun.

The most beautiful man I've ever seen in my life.

Dios: Of course.

No, strike that. Miki was still the most beautiful;
this man was beyond mere words.

Touga: After me, of course.

This, then, was what it meant to be a prince, to have
that raw _strength_ stretching forth from every fiber of your
being.

And of course, being able to get it up three times in quick succession.

He chuckled. "Kozue... it suits you, I think..."

Conversation over, I bend

went (or are you being cute?)

probably not see you again, but if you do see me again..."
He started fading out. "...beware... kozue

Kozue

After replacing my own clothes, I unlocked the door
and checked my watch. Still five minutes until the lab was
over? Had it _really_ only been that long?

Heh. Time has the meaning Akio gives it at Ohtori.

I look up at my friend and say, "I think I'm gonna
become a high school teacher once I finish college..."

I'll change my name to Miki and get involved in Secret Plots...

*ahem* To get to the point of this fic, now...

I love Shojo Kakumei Utena. (The english dub is bad enough
that I NEVER refer to it as Revolutionary Girl.)

Oddly, I liked it. Heard both versions, and for whatever reason, the
American voices worked for me.

Amusing little thing. Interesting that you centered on Kozue so much. It
worked that way. Nice work. Using first person made things flow well.

D.B. Sommer



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