--- Michael A Chase <mchase@ix.netcom.com> wrote:

Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Wed, 19 Jun 2002 20:31:23 -0700 (PDT) Raye
Johnsen <raye_j@yahoo.com>
wrote:

   Secondly, *PLEASE* comment and {critize :

criticize}!

::bangs head on desk and meeps:: Sorry.
 

        The retaliatory strike with waterbombs

had, however,

been most satisfying, and she had gotten

photographic

evidence.  Haruka didn't look good at all as a

drowned

rat, and her fans in the racing world would have

been

delighted to find that out.

I don't see how her fans would be pleased, her
rivals perhaps.  On the
other hand, her diehard fans would probably take any
pictures they could
get.

Partly that, and partly the fact that the water had
plastered Haruka's clothes to her skin, and it had
been a hot summer day, so she was wearing
light-coloured cotton.  I'm sure you've heard of the
wet T-shirt effect....

Michiru got several prints off Setsuna, but Setsuna is
keeping the negatives.  She has yet to name the price.

        Things were moving faster than she

{anticipated : had anticipated : had expected}.

I see what you mean; I'll correct it.
 

Interesting that Beryl is one of the images.

^__^ ... and I refuse to be drawn further.  The story
proper is about to begin.

This is an interesting variation and I look forward
eagerly to the next
installment.

Thank you; I hope you will enjoy them.

adp1.html:

    {Kanada : Kaneda} looked startled at Usagi's

open friendliness.  "I'm

Ten- Terou A- Kaneda.  It's good to meet you."

Ack!  I'll fix it; thank you for telling me!

Best wishes,
Raye

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   - C-3PO (to R2-D2), 'Star Wars: Attack of the Clones'

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