Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Fri, 21 Jun 2002 21:29:14 -0500 Donald Lee Granberry
<noharness@mac.com> wrote:
Panda-Genma shook his head no and growled out something
that Onna-Ranma could not understand directly, but knew that
it signaled his father's determination to continue their
pursuit.
Through chapter 4, I still don't recall seeing why Genma was so intent on
chasing Happosai.
The wind outside roared like a living thing, shaking
the solidly built old mansion as though it were merely a
dollhouse. Onna-Ranma tried to thank the woman for her help,
but the darkness swarmed in around him like a cloud of angry
bees this time. Resistance was futile. He fell into a deep
sleep.
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I don't think you are supposed to say that in front of the children. The
line of '='s was probably enough to show the change of viewpoint.
Ranma Saotome drifted upwards, ever so slowly, emerging
from the abyss by one tiny degree at a time until his hearing
began to work again. He was in large room. He could tell that
without opening his eyes. There was the faint sound of gently
falling rain. He opened his eyes. The ceiling was incredibly
far away, just barely {discernable : discernible} in the lamplight. The smell
of burning kerosene tickled his nose, making him want to
sneeze. The pounding in his head warned him to resist the
urge. His right shoulder hurt, especially just at the base of
his neck where it joined his spine. He tried to look at it
and see if he had been bleeding. That was when he noticed her.
"As far as our bodies and all go, we're probably{ :}
brother and sister, ya know," Ranma said, suddenly
discovering that he had an odd catch in his throat. I don't
like that idea for some reason, he thought. Why does it
bother me so much? It makes perfectly good sense. But why
would I want to have...no, no, no! That's sick. Well, true, I
have thought about it once or twice before, but ... it's just
too sick to think about. Ranma felt the urge to shake his
head, but caught himself just in the nick of time.
I don't know how those got in there. Are they in your copy? I just
checked and they are my copy of Rev 0 as well.
"Oh, come on, Ranma! Think about what your sayin'! Do ya
think Akane is gonna be in love with two of us, especially if
one of us is a girl? I don't know if {: I} can or even want to be
just friends with her."