Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Mon, 24 Jun 2002 18:19:53 -0500 Donald Lee Granberry
<noharness@mac.com> wrote:

       "Hey, don't let that nonsense at the clinic yesterday
get you down. They had it coming. They would have cut your
throat and laughed at you while they watched you {thrashed : thrash}
around if they had gotten the chance."

Or perhaps "laughed at you while you thrashed around"

 
Already re-worded.

       "Would you two like some breakfast?" Kasumi asked. She
sounded cheerful, but she was definitely {blurry : frayed} around the
edges.

       "All she had to do was heat it, Saotome," Ryouga said
around a mouthful of the stuff that had been in his bowl.
"It's an MRE."

       "MRE?"

       "Meal Ready to Eat. The army guys have been passin' 'em
out to everybody," Ryouga said. He chewed thoughtfully for a
moment, then added, "I think this is beef tips and gravy on
rice again. Can't be sure."

I remember Ryouga eats Akane's normal cooking without complaint too.
I've heard the reason the US won't sign up for any permanent war crime
tribunals is that the US Army fed MREs to some Iraqi POWs.

 
Bwaha! Bwahaha! I hadn't heard that one.

      "All I need is a little rest, Ranma, and I am about to
get in a long nap."

      "Okay, I'll come by and check on ya later. See ya in
three days, Doc."

I'm a little surprised that Ranma didn't offer to let him sleep at the
Tendo's.  The army might get a bit panicky if he doesn't wake up for three
days.

 
I didn't think about that.

       "Asleep," Ukyou said with a giggle. "She picked up a
club a little while ago and shouted, 'I am become Akane!
Destroyer of Kitchens!'  I made her go to bed."

That's a good Nabiki cooking joke.  Been reading Oppenheimer (or his
original source) again?

 Naw, it's just one of those lines that sticks with you for a long time
after you've heard it once or twice.
 

        Ranma felt a tight band around his chest loosen as he
watched the lines of fatigue on Kasumi's and his mother's
faces fade. The two of them dropped right off to sleep where
they sat. Soun and Ryouga carried them off to the large bed
Soun normally slept in {fist : on the first} floor. Soun gave Ukyou a
questioning look once he returned.

      "Oh, you guessed it. The guy was one of the patients
they hauled out of here this morning. Why don't I rinse some
of these off and start dryin' 'em?"

       "Sounds like a good idea to me," Ukyou said. "You guys
won't mind if I go catch a little nap will ya?"

Ukyou said earlier to air dry the dishes after rinsing them.  That's still
a good idea to avoid contaminating them from the towels.

 
Aw fiddlesticks. I meant have Ranko say something make the reason clear and
didn't. I'll fix it.


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