--- "Miller, Bert" <Bert.Miller@unisys.com> wrote:

Yay!  Another one!

Sadly, there won't be one at the end of July, as I'm going to be taking that
month to get caught up on some other stuff.

Boy, some of the historical changes DO go a ways back, don't
they.  (I note that you don't say _which_ Reich, leaving open
the possibility that it's the First or Second.)

Yay! Someone finally got that!
 

When did Burgundy come under the sovereignty of France?  A
quick web search says that the last independently reigning
Duke, Charles the Bold, died in 1477, so if there even is a
single point of deviation (I'm beginning to suspect there may
not be) it's back at least that far.

Not necessarily. :)

away, quickly closes the two briefcases and picks them up, 
before walking out through the still smouldering door.

Didn't notice this detail first time through... she's KEEPING
the money?  Heh.

Hey, she needs it! Running around Europe chasing conspiracies is expensive. :)
 

Highly localized radiation?  Presumably this is the "Burn"
mentioned in chapter 2, but what kind of weapon did this?

Would knowing that a certain film released in 1954 was originally to be called
"G", which was short for "Giant", clarify matters?

instead of making dumb jokes about his breath and quoting the 
play `Everyone Comes to Rick's'."

Heh.  Using the original title.  How many people are going to
get this one?  Still, for those who do, it's an interesting
alterverse detail.  And it's here, of course, where it's
described as a "play", where we get the Cannes reference back
at the beginning.

It *was* a play; just one that was never produced as such. :)
 

Finally, this seems to say something about how Sam differs
from Usagi, too.  Could Usagi recognize a quote from a 40-year-
old Japanese movie, even a romantic one?

She references Wyatt Earp at one point.

I don't think you were as successful in portraying Gloria
as you were with Lara, to be honest.  It's not just
that I feel no sympathy for her; I don't even feel that
I understand her.  Clearly she lies to herself very
thoroughly, but we have no real hint as to what is
beneath all that, how she got that way.  Lara had a
trauma, but we don't have anything corresponding for Gloria.
All I can suggest is one or two more clues,  flashing
childhood recollections, perhaps.  Trailer trash parents
verbally abusing a five-year-old?  Whispers of "half-breed"
from her elementary school years?  Does she think she
was weak and stupid because she was repeatedly told so?
I just don't quite get her.

But here's the thing -- you haven't really seen *Gloria*. You've seen the
Flame, pretending to be Gloria.

Chris Davies.

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