Aleh@aol.com wrote:

        Ranma smirked, his pain hidden behind the wall of cheerfulness that he
projected. "Well, Tofu-sensei isn't exactly a traditional doctor. He has a lot
of experience with shiatsu, moxibustion, and so on. Actually, he's a pretty good
martial artist, too. In fact, he's able to read auras almost as effectively as I
can. So... he'll be able to confirm that I'm telling the truth."

Tofu is most definitely a traditional doctor.  It's just that his tradition 
isn't Western.  It's quite a bit older than that.  

        Ranko thought for a second. "Why go by school at all?" she asked, "I mean,
why risk it?"
        Ranma shook his head. "No. Akane... I can't... I won't... I won't let
that... that... bastard Kunou..."
        "Oh," she said, "You want to stop the morning fights, don't you?"
        Ranma nodded. "Yes. I may not be able to risk doing it directly, at least
not yet, but I will do what I can. I," he said, his voice taking on a tone of
determination, "won't let Akane suffer one minute longer then I have to."

Geez.  Ranma's kind of crazy.  

        Ranma just nodded his head. "Well, we talked for a bit, and I wound up
mentioning Jusenkyo. One thing lead to another, and, well, Urd, the oldest,
offered to look up what our 'lessons' had been. She's the Goddess of the Past,
so it wasn't hard for her at all. Heh," he said with a smirk, "I probably
learned more from them than anyone else I'd ever met about the way the universe,
or should I say multiverse, actually works. After all, their job's to keep it
from breaking down."

You are spending an awful lot of time lecturing on the subject of Jyusenkyo 
curses.  If there are not going to be any curses in the future of this story
then shrink it down drastically or delete it entirely. If there are, then
I'd suggest still shrinking it down at the moment to "I was cursed but when
I learned the lesson the curse was there to teach me, I was cured", 
and providing more detail when it actually becomes important.  

        "Two words, Old Fart. Mountain and Sea." Ranko was virtually boiling;
after Ranma had mentioned the Saotome Forbidden Techniques, she had gone through
Genma's collection of scrolls, eventually finding them. After seeing what they
were capable of (although she wasn't capable of learning them; Ranma was right
in that she didn't know more than the very basics of using her aura), her rage
towards her father had taken new heights.

Genma is perfectly right not to teach those techniques to Ranko and he
is entirely within his rights not to.  

        Ranma pointedly ignored the argument, showing an uncommon degree of sense,
as Genma went into a credible impression of Happousai's 'Innocent Old Man' act.
Like the original, it didn't work very well.

Genma wouldn't play innocent there because he hasn't done anything wrong.
Instead he'd pull rank on Ranko, pointing that he is the sensei and she is
the student, and those techniques are sealed for a reason.  In fact it's
Ranko who should be on the defensive because she was misbehaving when she
went through Genma's private possessions.  

Don't make the mistake of assuming that Genma is a total doofus and that's
all there is to him.  He's more complicated than that.


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