Big improvement from your first attempt. The only problem I have so far is
that Ranma doesn't seem as well adjusted as someone who had a "condition" for
as long as he could remember might. Perhaps he would have more of a sense of
humor about it (If you've ever seen the movie, Mask, you'll see what I mean)
But then most life altering conditions do not change radically with puberty
which would add a big wrinkle to things. Regarding your concerns about
"uber-ranma" the only instance is where he displays his bilingual talents. But
then the only time "smart Ranma" worked for me was "Ill Met by Starlight" and
I doubt you want to go there. Good job handling Akane. Treating her as a
tempermental psycopath gets old to anyone who has past volume one. I think you
may have had Ranma and Akane click just a little too easily but that's just me
nitpicking. Anyway, look forward to seeing more.

                Bill

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